Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart compares the proportion of Australian males and females who did physical activities in 2010.

Overall, females are move active than males throughout the age groups. Females group started with the least ratio and increased with growing age, whereas male started with the most ratio and declined with increased age.

The 15-24 age males were at 52.8% and females at 47.7%, whereas the 25 to 34 age males ratio were declined and reached 42.2% and females at 48.9%. The 35 to 44 age males at 39.5% and females at 52.5%, males activity proportion decreased with age, while female physical activity increased with age.

The 45 to 54 age group of males were at 43.1% and females at peak 53.3%. While the 55 to 64 age group males were at 45.1% and females at 53%, the 65 and over age group males were stood at 46.7% and females at 47.1%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the chart’s subject and include figures for all six age groups, with the values generally matching the data. The overview also attempts to describe the contrasting patterns, and you correctly note that male participation falls to a low at ages 35–44 before rising, while female participation reaches its high at 45–54. However, the overview’s claim that females are more active “throughout” is contradicted by the 15–24 figures, where men lead. The statement that female activity simply increased with age is also incomplete because it declines after 45–54. Make the overview more precise by highlighting the early male lead, the female lead in the other groups, and the different turning points.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and a paragraph reporting figures. The age groups are presented in chart order, which helps readers follow the comparisons, and linking words such as “whereas” and “while” show an attempt to connect the two series. However, the overview repeats or oversimplifies trends that are then described again in the details, and the final paragraph becomes a long sequence of figures. Some links are awkward or incomplete, particularly the sentence beginning “While the 55 to 64 age group…”, which lacks a main clause. Grouping the figures into clearer comparisons—for example, the male low and subsequent recovery alongside the female peak and decline—would improve progression and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “age group,” “declined,” and “peak,” and the meaning of most comparisons is understandable. However, several word choices and collocations are unnatural or imprecise: “females are move active,” “least ratio,” “males ratio were declined,” and “males were stood at.” “Ratio” is not the right term for these percentages; use “rate” or “proportion.” There is also repetition of “age group” and “physical activities.” Aim for accurate, natural reporting phrases such as “the proportion of men fell to…” and “women’s participation peaked at…”. These improvements would make the vocabulary more precise and fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including comparisons joined with “whereas” and “while,” and the main figures remain understandable. Some grammatical errors persist, however. In “Females are move active,” the comparative form is incorrect; “males ratio were declined” has problems with both agreement and verb construction; and “The 35 to 44 age males at 39.5%” is missing a finite verb. The sentence beginning “While the 55 to 64 age group…” is also a dependent clause without a complete main clause. Check subject–verb agreement, ensure each sentence has a complete clause, and use consistent past-tense reporting for the 2010 data. More accurate control of these structures would strengthen the response.

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