Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian female and male poplulation from different age catogaries, who practiced daily exercises for fitness in the year 2010.

Overall, the females from different age groups dominated in numbers, with the only acception of males in the youngest cateory.

Females between the age of 35 to 64 dominated in numbers from all other age group crossing above 53 in average in the age group category. The younges generation age between 15 to 34 and the older age over 65 with the average daily workout were above 47.5.

In male category the youngest generation age between 15 to 24 dominated the reest of male age groups considerably. Surpassing 52 percent in thier age group. The older group 65 and above followed them with above 46 percent. The lowest age group was of men age between 35 and 44 only 39 percent had time to do regualr workout. Rest of men age group average was about 43 percent.

In total the female average percentage is higher than the male who performed regular workout.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main pattern accurately: women recorded higher activity in every age group except 15–24, and you note the male low point among 35–44-year-olds. The overview also recognises that women’s figures were strongest in the middle age groups. These are relevant features and the response covers the chart, but some comparisons are imprecise or unclear. For example, “crossing above 53 in average” does not accurately describe all groups from 35 to 64: the 35–44 figure is 52.5%, while the other two are about 53%. The statement that women aged 15–34 averaged “above 47.5” is also misleading, since the 25–34 figure is 48.9% and the 15–24 figure is 47.7%. Report the key figures more precisely and compare the rise and fall across age groups.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate descriptions of female and male figures, followed by a concluding comparison. This makes the information generally easy to follow. However, progression within the body is sometimes weakened by unclear phrasing and repetitive references to “age group” and “dominated in numbers.” The final sentence repeats the overview rather than adding a useful comparison. Some links, such as “The older group… followed them,” require the reader to infer which group is being compared. Improve cohesion by grouping the figures into clear trends—for example, women’s rise to a peak at 45–54 and subsequent decline, alongside the men’s fall and recovery—and use precise references to the age bands.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age groups,” “dominated,” and “average,” and the general meaning is usually understandable. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing statistical data. “Practiced daily exercises for fitness” suggests daily exercise, whereas the chart reports regular physical activity; “dominated in numbers” is also an awkward way to describe higher percentages. There are noticeable spelling errors, including “poplulation,” “catogaries,” “acception,” and “regualr,” which reduce precision. Aim for concise, conventional language such as “the proportion who exercised regularly,” “was higher than,” and “reached a peak.” Check spelling carefully and avoid repeating broad phrases when exact comparisons are available.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of sentence forms, including an overview sentence with a contrast and longer descriptions of the age groups. The main comparisons can generally be understood, but some grammatical errors and incomplete constructions make parts less clear. For instance, “The younges generation age between 15 to 34…” lacks a clear subject and uses an awkward age-range structure; “Surpassing 52 percent in thier age group” is a sentence fragment. In “The lowest age group was of men age between 35 and 44 only 39 percent had time,” two clauses are joined without suitable punctuation or a linking word. Use complete sentences, write “aged 15–34” or “between 15 and 34,” and separate clauses with appropriate punctuation. These changes would make your comparisons more controlled.

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