Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart compares the percentage of both men and women in different age groups who did regular exercises in 2010 at Australia.

Overall, from all age groups the female contribution was more when compared to men, but in the young age male was higher and in the old age the contribution was almost similar.

Looking at the detail, initially the percentage of men who did regular physical activity was at 52.8% in the young age, while women stood at 47.7%. In the next age group 25 to 34, the prroportion of women doing exercises was rose to 48.9%, but the male got drooped to 42.2%. Nextly, in 35 to 44 age group again female dominate the men where the percentage of men was at downfall.

Moreover, in 45 to 54 age group the highest value in the figure 53.3% for women and percentage of men also got increased from the previous age group to 43.1%. In 55 to 64 group also, the female dominates the male by 53%. Finally, the 65 and over age group had almost simlar number of males and females, where the male stood at 46.7% and female at 47.1% respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the chart’s main comparisons and provide an overview: men lead in the youngest group, women are higher across most other groups, and the figures are close among those aged 65 and over. The figures you give for ages 15–24, 25–34, 45–54, 55–64 and 65+ match the chart. However, the 35–44 comparison is not completed with the key values: women reached 52.5%, while men were at 39.5%. Also, “from all age groups” overstates the female lead, since men are higher among 15–24-year-olds. The overview is relevant, but a more precise summary of the overall pattern and the missing comparison would make the coverage more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure, moving from an introduction and overview to age-group details, and the sequence follows the chart from youngest to oldest. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Moreover,” and “Finally” help signal progression. However, some transitions feel mechanical or do not clearly connect the information: “Nextly” is awkward, and the paragraph about ages 35–44 does not state the female figure before moving on. The overview’s broad claim that women lead across all groups also sits uneasily beside the later detail that men lead in the youngest group. Grouping the age comparisons more deliberately and using clearer references would make the progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age group,” “stood at,” and “increased,” so the topic remains understandable. There is also some attempt to vary wording, but several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing data: “female contribution,” “did regular exercises,” “got drooped,” and “female dominates the men.” Spelling slips such as “prroportion” and “simlar” also reduce accuracy. These issues make the vocabulary range seem limited and sometimes require the reader to interpret the intended meaning. Prefer precise terms such as “proportion,” “participation rate,” “fell,” and “was higher than,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more developed sentence forms, and the main comparisons are generally understandable. However, control is uneven, particularly in verb forms and sentence construction. For example, “the proportion … was rose” combines incompatible verb forms, while “the male got drooped” is not grammatically formed. The phrase “in the young age male was higher” also lacks a clear comparison structure, and “at Australia” uses an incorrect preposition. Some sentences are long and joined with several clauses, which makes these problems more noticeable. Build comparisons with reliable patterns such as “the rate for men fell to…” and “women recorded a higher figure than men,” then check each sentence for a complete, correctly formed verb.

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