Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The chart illustrates the percentgage of men and women from different ages who do physical activites in the year 2010.

The overall percentage of Men and Women is calculated from young people to senior citizens.In this group both Males and females are included. If we study the chart females are doing more physical activites rather than Mens of all age groups

If we discuss about the age group of 15 to 24 year people we can see that Mens are doing more physical ativites than womens but there is not a huge difference in it. Now, numbe rof people from the age group of 25 to 34 the womns are doing better than mens and if we see the age group of 35 to 44 there is a huge pump in the Womens.

The age of 45 to 54 and 55 to 64 womens again are on top with 53.3% which is the highest number yet, but the last age group of 65 year old people was the same in both Mens and Womens.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s subject and make an attempt to describe age-group comparisons, including the male lead among 15–24-year-olds and women’s higher participation in several later groups. However, the overview is inaccurate: women do not lead in every age group, and the final group is not equal (46.7% for men versus 47.1% for women). The claim that women reach 53.3% in both the 45–54 and 55–64 groups also misreports the latter figure, which is 53.0%. Important patterns are under-developed, especially the male decline to 35–44 followed by a gradual rise, and the female increase to a peak before falling. Select and report the main trends more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has some organisation: it begins by introducing the chart, then moves through age groups, and uses basic sequencing phrases such as “If we discuss” and “Now.” This gives the reader a general sense of the topic. However, there is no clear, effective overview paragraph, and the progression is difficult to follow because several age groups and comparisons are crowded into long sentences. The repeated “if we see” phrasing is mechanical, while links between the figures and the overall trends are limited. Group the information into a concise overview and logically ordered detail paragraphs, and use clearer comparisons such as “by contrast” or “whereas” to show how the sexes’ patterns differ.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary, including “age group,” “percentage,” “highest,” and “difference,” so the reader can recognise the subject and intended comparisons. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or informal for describing chart data. “Huge pump” is not an appropriate expression for a rise, and “doing better” is vague; “participation rate” and “increased” would be more precise. There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, including “percentgage,” “activites,” “womns,” and “numbe rof,” which distract from the information. Aim for accurate, neutral chart language and check spelling carefully, especially for repeated key terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, for example, “If we study the chart females are doing more physical activites rather than Mens of all age groups.” However, complex attempts are often faulty, and frequent errors make some comparisons unclear. Examples include missing punctuation after introductory clauses, “the age group of 15 to 24 year people,” and “the last age group of 65 year old people was the same in both Mens and Womens.” The final sentence also incorrectly presents the figures as equal. Use shorter, controlled sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check articles, plurals, agreement, and punctuation. For example: “Among 15–24-year-olds, the male rate was higher than the female rate.”

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