Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar graph illustrates the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Overall, female age group between 35 to 64 was contributed largest time in physical activity, whereas age 15-24 recorded highest by Male. In contrast, male and female of 65 and above had spent similar proprotion of time on physical activity.

Male age 15 to 24 did highest physical activity at 52.8%, it decreased to 42.2% from age 25-34. Among age 35 to 44 was just 39.5%, it keep increased at 45.1% in age 55 to 64.Furthermore, men and women of age 65 and over had did physical execrise at 46.75 and 47.1% respectively.

In addition, age group of 15 to 24 female accounted at 47.7% which was lowest then man, however, after age 25 to 54 it gradually increased from 48.9% to 53.3%, slighlty dipped at 535 at age of 55 to 64. Despite, above 65 age, female shows the slow increment on ther physical activity over the age of 64, whereas the figure of males was fluctuating.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the chart’s subject and give a relevant overview: women recorded higher activity across much of the middle age range, while men were highest in the youngest group, and the oldest groups were close. Several figures are reported accurately, including 52.8% for young men and 53.3% for women aged 45–54. However, some details are incomplete or inaccurate: men’s rate rises from 39.5% to 43.1% and then 45.1%, but the 43.1% figure is omitted; “535” appears to mean 53%, and the claim that women’s activity showed a “slow increment” after 64 is not supported, as it falls to 47.1%. The overview also says women aged 35–64 contributed the “largest time,” which is unclear. Select and describe the main trends more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and separate paragraphs for male and female figures. This helps the reader follow the broad comparison. However, progression within the detail paragraphs is uneven: the male paragraph skips the 45–54 figure, and the female paragraph moves from the youngest group to a broad age range before returning to the oldest group. Some linking expressions are awkward or do not show the intended relationship, such as “Despite, above 65 age,” while “Furthermore” introduces a comparison that could be integrated more clearly. Use a consistent age-by-age sequence and connect each comparison explicitly. Clearer referencing and more accurate transitions would make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary such as “percentage,” “age group,” “decreased,” and “increased,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or unnatural, including “contributed largest time,” “accounted at,” and “did physical exercise.” There are also spelling errors such as “proprotion,” “execrise,” and “slighlty,” alongside the unclear “535.” These slips sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to interpret. Aim for precise, conventional language for describing data—for example, say that a percentage “was highest” or “stood at” a value, and that a figure “rose” or “fell.” Proofreading spelling and choosing natural collocations would improve clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons introduced by “whereas” and “however.” Nevertheless, many sentences contain errors in verb forms, agreement, articles or sentence construction. For example, “female age group between 35 to 64 was contributed” uses an incorrect passive form, and “it keep increased” has an incorrect verb form. In “men and women … had did physical exercise,” the verb sequence is also faulty. Some clauses are joined with commas where a full stop or conjunction is needed, as in “Among age 35 to 44 was just 39.5%, it keep increased…”. These errors can make relationships between ideas unclear. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and build complete clauses before adding complex comparisons.

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