Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar graph illustrates the percentage of a men and women who are from Australia in different age group and who did regular physical activity in year 2010.The units are measure in percentages.

Overall, comparing six different age group of people and the interest in physical activity; in all age group, females were the most interested compared with male, while male peaked in 15 to 24 age group only.

For the age group between 15 to 34, males remained the same in their interest or physical activity at around 48.9 % respectively, whereas female's were down by 5 % or both the ages. For age group between 35 to 54, males increased by 4%, and female remained the same. For age group of people between 55 and over, male increased b 1% and female decreased by 3%.

For the age group of senior citizens if we compare both the females and males they were at ultimately same percentage, 46.7 and 47.1% respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies the chart’s subject and attempts an overview, but it does not accurately report several central features, so the task is addressed only minimally. The overview says women were more active in every age group, yet men had the higher figure among 15–24-year-olds (52.8% versus 47.7%). The comparisons that follow are also substantially misread: men did not remain around 48.9% from 15 to 34, and women did not fall by 5% across those ages. The response also omits the important pattern that women’s activity rises to a peak of 53.3% at 45–54 before declining. Focus on accurate figures and describe the overall gender crossover and contrasting trends before selecting key comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: an introduction is followed by an overview and then age-based comparisons, and phrases such as “Overall” and “For the age group” signal the intended structure. However, the response has no clear progression through the chart’s main patterns, and the repeated age-group openings make the account feel list-like. Some comparisons are difficult to follow, particularly “males increased by 4%, and female remained the same,” because the age ranges and reference points are not clearly connected. The final sentence repeats the senior-age comparison without developing the overview. Group the data into meaningful stages—for example, younger groups and older groups—and use clear references to show which figures are being compared.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses a basic range of chart-related vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age group,” “increased,” and “decreased,” which makes the general topic recognisable. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or repetitive, sometimes obscuring the intended comparison. “The interest in physical activity” is not a precise description of participation rates, while “remained the same in their interest or physical activity” is awkward and unclear. Expressions such as “ultimately same percentage” and “male peaked” are also unsuitable or imprecise in this context. Use standard reporting language such as “the proportion who exercised regularly,” “stood at,” “rose,” and “was higher than,” and vary these expressions while keeping the meaning exact.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer sentence forms, including comparisons introduced by “whereas” and “if we compare,” but the range is limited and errors occur frequently enough to make several sentences awkward or unclear. Examples include “a men and women,” “different age group,” and “female’s were down,” which show problems with articles, number agreement, and plural forms. The sentence beginning “For the age group between 15 to 34” also has an unclear structure, and punctuation is inconsistent, including the missing space after the first full stop. Build accuracy with straightforward comparative sentences first, checking articles, singular and plural nouns, and subject–verb agreement; then add more complex clauses once those patterns are secure.

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