Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Bar chart illustrates the amount of males and females doing daily physical exercises in 2010.

The data shows the people of age 15 to 24 were more involved in doing physical exercises whereas men showed less interest in doing physical exercises from age 35 above as compared to women.

If we look closely people wo are mostly involved in regular physical exercises are mostly youngsters both men(52.8%) and women(47.7%) aging from 15-24 andwomen are actively participating in physical activities in all age groups while the men are not that active as compared to women.

Elder people both males and females over 65 are also very active with percentage of 46.7% and 47.1% respectively.

Overall women were more active then men except the men of 15 to 24 age group.We can see a sustantial increase in women doing regular physical exercises from age 25 and over and the trend of men doing regular exercised has decreased from age 25 and above as compared to women.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main contrast: women recorded higher participation than men in every age group except 15–24, and you note the relatively high figures among people aged 65 and over. The figures you give for the youngest and oldest groups are accurate. However, the overview is not fully precise: men’s activity did not simply decrease from age 25 onward, since it rose after reaching a low of 39.5% among 35–44-year-olds. Likewise, women’s participation rises to a peak among 45–54-year-olds before falling, rather than showing an uninterrupted increase. Include the key middle-age figures and describe both trends more accurately to make the report more complete and clear.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable sequence, moving from an opening statement to comparisons and a concluding overview. However, the progression is weakened by repeated points: the claim that young people are most involved appears in both the second and third sentences, and the final paragraph repeats the comparison between women and men. Paragraphing is also limited, with several distinct observations crowded together. Some linking is attempted through “If we look closely” and “Overall,” but these phrases do not always clarify how the details relate. Organise the report into a concise overview followed by grouped comparisons, and use references such as “this figure” only when their meaning is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary such as “regular physical exercises,” “age groups,” “percentage,” and “actively participating,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited by repeated use of “physical exercises” and “active,” and some expressions are imprecise or unnatural for describing chart data, including “amount of males and females” and “showed less interest.” Spelling errors such as “sustantial” and “exercised” also reduce accuracy. Choose more precise reporting language, for example “proportion” or “participation rate,” and vary verbs with “rose,” “fell,” and “peaked.” This would make the description more concise and better suited to an academic chart summary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including the contrast in “women were more active then men except the men of 15 to 24 age group.” The main comparisons can usually be understood, but some grammatical errors affect clarity. For example, “people wo are mostly involved” has a missing letter, while “men(52.8%) and women(47.7%) aging from 15-24” lacks clear punctuation and has an awkward sentence structure. In “women were more active then men,” the comparison needs “than,” and the age-group phrase would be clearer as “men aged 15–24.” Check sentence boundaries, punctuation around figures, and the grammatical form of comparisons to improve control.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.