Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

To show the chart privided information about persentage men and women in Australia to since 2010 .

Overall view of chart to given instructions and percentage of men is the highest in 15to24 age is52. 8 on another way the women is peak of 45to54 in 2010.

Let discussed to thoroughly percentages first of all in 15 to 24 age growing men is 52.8and women is47. 7 lower than, to other hand in 25to 34 age the women is higest is 48.8 and men is come down is 42.5 go to other ages is 35 to 40 women is highest and men is lower down

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and make an attempt at an overview, noting that men peak in the youngest group and women peak later. However, the overview is inaccurate: women’s highest figure is 53.3% among 45–54-year-olds, not simply a clearly reported peak as written, and the response omits the main overall pattern that women exceed men in every age group except 15–24. Several figures are misreported, including women at 25–34 (48.9%, not 48.8) and men in that group (42.2%, not 42.5); the reference to “35 to 40” is also not a chart category. The response is only 105 words, below the required 150, and ends without covering the remaining groups. Develop a complete, accurate summary of the key comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, beginning with an introduction and an overview before moving to figures. However, the ideas are not arranged coherently enough to guide the reader through the chart. The transition “Let discussed to thoroughly” does not establish a clear sequence, and “to other hand” does not connect the comparison accurately. The final sentence combines several age groups and comparisons without clear boundaries, then stops before the data are fully covered. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and the detailed comparisons, and group the age bands logically—for example, the youngest group first, followed by the remaining groups. Clear sentence boundaries and accurate linking phrases would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary includes a few relevant chart terms, such as “percentage,” “age,” “highest,” and “peak,” so the topic is recognisable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and several spelling and word-choice errors strain understanding: “privided,” “persentage,” “higest,” and “lower down.” Phrases such as “growing men” and “the women is peak” are not natural ways to describe chart figures. Aim for precise reporting language, including “stood at,” “was higher than,” “declined,” and “reached a peak.” Check spelling carefully and use “men” and “women” consistently as plural nouns. More accurate collocations would help you communicate comparisons without relying repeatedly on “highest” and “lower.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response shows very limited control of sentence structure, with frequent errors that sometimes make the intended comparisons difficult to understand. For example, “To show the chart privided information…” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “the women is higest” has problems with subject–verb agreement and sentence formation. The overview sentence also joins ideas awkwardly: “the percentage of men is the highest … on another way the women is peak.” There are inconsistent spaces and punctuation around figures, and several clauses run together without clear sentence boundaries. Practise writing short, complete comparison sentences first, such as “Men recorded 52.8% in the youngest group, compared with 47.7% for women.” Then build variety with accurate clauses using “whereas” or “while.”

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