Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian men and women of different age groups participation in regular fitness activities in 2010.

Overall, it is evident that female had strongest participation than men. Male aged 15-24 represents the strongest participation, whereas female aged 45-54 accound for the strongest participation in 2010.

Firstly, 52.8% males aged 15-24 represented for the highest figures, followed by males aged 35-44 at 52.5%. However. females of aged 45-53 recorded the highest figures, at 53.3%, followed by females aged 55-64, at 53%, while males of aged 45-54 and aged 55-64 represents 43.1% and 45.1% respectively.

42.2% males aged 25-34 engaged in regeular fitness while females of same aged cateogry represents 48.9% proportion. Similarly only 39.9% males of aged 35-44 particpated in fitness to represents the lowest fighure for men, while women of aged 65 and over had the lowest participation at 47.1%. In contrast, males aged 65 and over represents 46.7% participation, whereas women aged 55-64 accounted for53%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the chart’s subject and include an overview noting that women generally had higher participation, while men led in the youngest group. You also report several relevant figures. However, some key comparisons are inaccurate: 52.5% is the figure for women aged 35–44, not men, and men’s lowest figure is 39.5%, not 39.9%. The overview also says men aged 15–24 had the strongest participation, but does not clarify that this is only among men; the overall peak is women aged 45–54 at 53.3%. The reference to women aged 45–53 should be 45–54. More accurate selection and reporting of the main trends would make the summary clearer and more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs containing comparisons. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, the progression is not consistently clear because figures and age groups are sometimes grouped in ways that make comparisons difficult to follow. For example, the first detail paragraph moves from the youngest men to a misattributed figure, then to women and two male groups. The final paragraph returns to age groups already mentioned. Linking words such as “Firstly,” “Similarly,” and “In contrast” are used, but some do not clearly express the relationship between the data. Organise the details by a consistent pattern, such as comparing men and women within each age group or describing the trends separately.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “participation,” “recorded,” and “accounted for,” and the meaning is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “strongest participation,” “represented for the highest figures,” and “engaged in regular fitness.” Repetition of “aged” and “figures” also makes the description less precise. There are noticeable spelling errors, including “regeular,” “cateogry,” and “fighure,” which reduce the accuracy of the writing. Use standard chart-reporting phrases such as “the highest proportion,” “stood at,” and “participated in regular physical activity,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer comparative sentences, and the overall meaning can usually be followed. However, grammatical control is inconsistent, with recurring problems in agreement, sentence construction, and punctuation. For example, “female had strongest participation” needs a plural subject and an article, while “males … represents” has a subject–verb agreement error. The construction “39.9% males … participated in fitness to represents” is also faulty, and the full stop in “However.” interrupts the sentence incorrectly. These errors occur across the response and sometimes make relationships between figures harder to understand. Practise accurate comparative sentence patterns and check that each sentence has a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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