Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrates the proportion of Australian men and women in various age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Overall, it can be clearly seen that females across all the group ages are more involved in regular physical activities as compared to men which are less involved.

In detail,as the ages increases of both groups young boys with age 15 to 24 accounts for 52.8% which are involved in regular physical activities as compared to women with the same age holds for 47.7%, following the other group of men and women with age 25 to 34, the percentage of men falls to 42.2% and that of women increased to 48.9%.Continued the downward movement as the age increasd to 35 to 44 in men which holds a 39.5% involved in physical activities while women on the other hand accounts for 52.5%.

Furthermore,from 45 years old to old age men with 65 and over sincethse are more involved in physical activities as compared to that of 35 to 44 age group.In contrast the women proportion remained steady in upward movement and reached to 53.3% the highest proprtion among all.in 65 and over age men an women the proportion remained approximately same.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s subject and include several accurate figures, such as 52.8% for men aged 15–24 and 39.5% for men aged 35–44. However, the overview is inaccurate: women were not more active in every age group, since men led among 15–24-year-olds. The final comparison is also unclear and omits the key pattern that women’s rate rose to a peak of 53.3% at ages 45–54, then edged down, while men’s rate recovered after its low at 35–44. The description of the older groups does not report the figures or clearly explain the comparison. Select the main trends accurately and summarise them before giving supporting details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, an overview and two detail paragraphs, so there is some organisation and the reader can follow the age groups in sequence. However, progression is weakened by long, crowded sentences and unclear links between ideas. For example, “In detail, as the ages increases…” combines several comparisons, while “Furthermore” introduces a paragraph whose point is difficult to identify. Some connectors are used mechanically or inaccurately, including “Continued the downward movement” and “In contrast” before a statement about women’s upward trend. Use one clear comparison per sentence, group the figures into meaningful trends, and make each paragraph’s focus explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “proportion,” “percentage,” “downward movement” and “remained steady,” and the meaning is generally recoverable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which makes parts of the report difficult to interpret. “Young boys” is unsuitable for the 15–24 age group, and “more involved” is less precise than describing a higher participation rate. There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, such as “increasd” and “proprtion.” Aim for precise chart language and check spelling carefully; avoid repeating “involved in physical activities” when “participation rate” can express the idea more concisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some complex sentences and comparisons, but control is inconsistent, and errors frequently make the relationships between figures harder to follow. Examples include “as the ages increases,” “which are involved,” and “the percentage of men falls,” where agreement or verb forms do not fit the subject and time reference. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also problematic: “48.9%.Continued…” runs into the next sentence, and several clauses are joined without clear structure. Use past-tense reporting consistently for the 2010 data, check subject–verb agreement, and divide long sentences into shorter, complete comparisons. More accurate simple sentences would improve clarity before you add complex structures.

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