Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

We can observe, in this chart a difrences betwen the porcentag of Auatralian man and women in defrent ages withe regular physical activity that they do .

Ferst ,in age from 15 to 24 we can see thath the man were superioure from women withe a porcentage of 52.8 For 47.7 percent for womens .

In the othere hand, in the age from 25 to 34 we observe thath womens won his time by a porcentege of 48.9 for them and 42.2 for the mens with is clearly lower.

thats also,the case in groupe of age from 35 to 44 and 45 to 54 and 55 to 64 were the women keep there place on front withe a higher pourcentege of 52.5 and 53.3 and 53 against 39.5 and 43.1 and 45.1 for mens .

Howevere, they finily be cinde of ecuale in the age of 65 and over withe atini supiriore porcentege for womens by 47.1 againste 46.7 for mens.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You report the figures for all six age groups and correctly identify the main comparison: men have the higher rate only among 15–24-year-olds, while women lead in the other groups. The values you give are consistent with the chart. However, the response is largely a sequence of individual comparisons rather than a fully developed summary. It lacks a clear overview of the overall pattern, such as men’s rate falling to a low among 35–44-year-olds before rising, while women’s rate peaks in middle age and then declines. Adding this overview and selecting the most important trends would make the response address the task more completely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The age groups are presented in a generally sensible order, and linking phrases such as “First,” “On the other hand,” and “However” show an attempt to connect comparisons. Nevertheless, the response has little overall progression: it moves through the data one group at a time without an opening overview or a concluding synthesis. Several transitions are awkward or repetitive, particularly “that’s also, the case” and “they finally be kind of equal,” which make relationships between ideas harder to follow. Organise the response into a brief overview followed by grouped comparisons—for example, the younger group and the middle-to-older groups—and use clear, accurate linking expressions.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age group,” “higher,” and “against,” so the basic comparisons can be understood. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate, such as “won his time,” “keep there place on front,” and “be cinde of ecuale.” Frequent spelling errors—including “difrences,” “porcentage,” and “womens”—also make the writing less clear and reduce precision. Build a reliable set of terms for describing data, such as “rate,” “exceed,” “peak,” and “decline,” and check spelling and collocations carefully. This would help you express the trends more naturally and accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to form longer sentences to compare several age groups, but the range of sentence structures is limited and these attempts are often difficult to control. For example, “thats also,the case in groupe of age…” runs several comparisons together without a clear grammatical structure, while “they finily be cinde of ecuale” does not form a clear clause. There are also recurring problems with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, as in “the man were” and the opening sentence, which lacks a clear main clause. Use shorter, complete sentences first, then add controlled clauses with “while” or “whereas.” Check subject–verb agreement and punctuation when editing.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.