Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart compares the percentages of different age groups of Australian men and women who did regular exercise in 2010.

Overall,the bar chart shows that percentages of different group members for instance below age 65 men do physical activity 50 percent and the women or age less than 24 do physical activity greater than remaining age group members.

The age less than 24 women did exercise greater than 50% whereas men at this age did exercise less than 50%. On the hand, the age group 25 to 34 women did 42.2% and men did 48.9%. While, age group 34 to 44 Women did 39.5% and male did 52.5%.

Age group 45 to 54 females can do exercise 43% and males 53%. Age group of 55 to 64 females can do 45% and males do 53%. However, over 65 years age group both males and females accounted for approximately same 47%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and make an attempt to compare age groups, but the main features are not reported accurately enough. Several figures are reversed: for ages 25–34, women were at 48.9% and men at 42.2%, whereas you assign these values to the opposite sexes; the same reversal occurs for ages 35–44 and 45–54. You also state that men below 65 were at 50%, which is not supported by the chart. The overview is unclear and includes a misleading claim that women under 24 were above 50%; their figure was 47.7%. To improve, give a clear overview of the broad pattern—men were highest among the youngest group, while women were higher in most other groups—and check each sex and age label against the data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure: an introduction, an overview, and a sequence of age-group comparisons. This gives the reader some sense of how the information is organised. However, progression is limited because the comparisons are presented as a list, and the overview does not clearly prepare the reader for the details. Linking phrases such as “On the hand,” “While,” and “However” are used inaccurately or mechanically, and some sentences are fragments, including “While, age group 34 to 44…” Group the data more logically—for example, describe the younger groups first and then the older groups—and use accurate links such as “By contrast” or “Meanwhile.” Clearer paragraphing and references would make the comparisons easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough basic vocabulary to identify the topic and make simple comparisons, including “percentages,” “age group,” and “approximately.” However, the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or unnatural, such as “did exercise,” “do physical activity,” and “age less than 24.” These expressions make the report less precise and sometimes obscure whether you mean the male or female figure. There are also awkward choices such as “different group members” and “can do exercise,” which do not suit a chart description. Build a small set of accurate reporting phrases—such as “the proportion who exercised,” “stood at,” and “was higher than”—and use them consistently to describe the data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentence forms, including the overview and comparisons introduced with “whereas” and “however,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in sentence structure and punctuation occur throughout: “Overall,the” lacks a space, “On the hand” is incomplete, and “While, age group…” is not a complete sentence. There are also problems with articles and phrasing, as in “the age group of 55 to 64,” and with verb forms, such as “females can do exercise.” These issues sometimes make relationships between the figures difficult to interpret. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use past-tense reporting forms such as “women exercised” or “the figure was.”

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