Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrated the comparison of australian men and women of different age groups who regularly did physical activity in 2010.

Overall, the percentage of australian women rose at every age group than faced a slight decline above the age of 64. Although, percentage of young australian men dominates at start, than there is a massive decline aovr the age of 24, than slowly rose.

At the age group of 15 to 24, australian mens who did the physical activity regularly, dominated with the percentage of 52.8 as compared with the australian women whose percentage was 47.7. But, the australian women age groups of 35 to 44, 45 to 54 and 55 to 64 dominates with the percentages of 52.5, 53.3, 53 respectively, while australian men slighly rose up having the percentages 39.5, 43.1 and 45.1 respectively, after the decline.

Australian women also dominated at age group of 25 to 34 having the percentage of 48.9, while australian men faced a decline having the percentage of 42.2. Age group of 65 and over had almost same the percentage.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main pattern: men lead in the youngest group, while women have higher participation in the other age groups, and you report several figures accurately. The overview also notes the men’s sharp fall after the youngest group and subsequent recovery. This covers the key features and supports the response well. However, the overview says women’s percentage “rose at every age group,” which is not accurate: it rises to 45–54, then dips slightly at 55–64 and more noticeably among those 65 and over. The final comparison that the oldest group had “almost same” percentages is also vague; the figures are 46.7% for men and 47.1% for women. More precise coverage of these patterns would make the summary more complete and assured.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure, with an introduction, an overview and two detail paragraphs. The age groups are generally presented in a sensible order, and comparisons such as the figures for 15–24 and 35–64 help the reader follow the data. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical or unclear. Repeated use of “than” and “while” does not always show the intended relationship, and “At the age group of 15 to 24” is an awkward transition. The final sentence introduces the oldest group abruptly and does not explain the comparison. Grouping the data more deliberately—for example, men’s trend in one paragraph and women’s in another—and using precise links such as “whereas” and “by contrast” would improve progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age group,” “decline” and “dominated,” so the topic is generally clear. There is some attempt to vary descriptions of change, such as “rose” and “decline.” However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing data: “dominated” is too forceful for a simple higher percentage, “rose up” is redundant, and “faced a decline” is an awkward collocation. Spelling and word-form slips, including “slighly” and “aovr,” also reduce precision. Aim for a controlled set of standard reporting expressions and use them accurately; this will make the comparisons sound more natural and help the reader interpret the figures without distraction.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons joined with “while” and a concessive opening with “Although.” However, control is inconsistent, and several sentence patterns are faulty. For example, “Although, percentage …” is an incomplete or incorrectly punctuated clause, while “the percentage … rose … than faced” does not form a grammatical comparison. There are also agreement and article problems in phrases such as “australian mens” and “Age group … had almost same the percentage.” These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise complete clause structures, accurate comparative forms (“higher than”), and consistent use of articles and plural nouns; then check punctuation around linking words.

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