Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar graph illustrates the proportion of australian men and women who engaged in regular physical activity in 2010. Overall, women were more physical active as compared to men in most aged groups, the exceptions was only in 45 to 54 aged group where men recoded the higheest nu,ber of participants than women, meanwhile the percentage of men who did pysical regular exercise slighltly increase in most old aged groups, on the other hamd women who engaged with pyscisal regular exercises were recorded in young aged group.

Looking closely at aged 15 to 24 group, the total number of participants were approximately 100 in which 52.8 percentage of male were attatched with physical regular exercise and 47.7 percentage of womens were participated.while in the 25 to 34 aged group the percentage of men were more at 48.9 percent as compared to women at 42.2 percent.

In the other aged group 35 to 44 and 45 to 54 the percentage of men were almost same in both groups at approximately ar 53 percent, and in 35 to 44 the percentage of women were 39.9 percent and increased to 43.1 percent in 45 to 54 aged group.meanwhile,in the 55 to 64 aged group the figure shoed the men were 53 percent and 45.1 percent of women showed activity, and in last 65 and over aged group, both men and women showed almost same figure for pyysical regular activity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and attempt an overview, but the main comparisons are repeatedly misreported, so the response only minimally fulfils the task. For example, women exceeded men in every age group except 15–24, not 45–54; at 45–54, women were at 53.3% and men at 43.1%. The 25–34 figures are also reversed, and the 35–44 and 55–64 figures are substantially confused. The claim that the total was “approximately 100” is not a meaningful chart feature, since the bars show percentages rather than participant counts. To improve, check each series against the chart and give a concise, accurate overview of the overall pattern and key highs and lows before selecting supporting figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an opening overview is followed by details arranged broadly by age group. This gives the reader some sense of progression, and phrases such as “Looking closely” and “meanwhile” attempt to connect ideas. However, the overview combines several points in a long, difficult-to-follow sentence, and the body’s comparisons are not consistently organised by male versus female or by the most important trends. Some transitions are awkward or repetitive, while missing spaces after full stops make boundaries unclear. Use separate, focused paragraphs and group the data logically—for example, first describe the male pattern, then the female pattern, while highlighting the main contrast. Clearer sentence boundaries and more precise linking would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “proportion,” “percentage,” “aged group,” and “physical activity,” so the topic is generally identifiable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning difficult to interpret. Examples include “more physical active,” “attatched with physical regular exercise,” and “the total number of participants,” which does not accurately describe percentages on this chart. Spelling errors such as “higheest,” “pysical,” and “shoed” are also noticeable. Aim for a smaller set of accurate chart-reporting expressions, such as “the proportion who exercised,” “stood at,” “rose,” and “was higher than,” and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt longer sentences and use some subordinate clauses, as in “while in the 25 to 34 aged group…,” but these complex constructions are often faulty, and sentence control is inconsistent. Agreement errors occur in phrases such as “the total number … were” and “the percentage of men were”; the latter should use a singular verb. There are also problems with articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries, including “the exceptions was only” and the run-on transition “participated.while.” These errors sometimes make relationships between figures hard to follow. Practise writing shorter, complete comparison sentences first, checking subject–verb agreement and punctuation, then combine ideas with accurate clauses such as “whereas” or “while.”

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