Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar graph demonstrates the proportion of Australian men and women in various age groups who get involved regularly in physical activities in the year of 2010.

Overall, females at the mid of thier age did regular activities while the males showed less intrest in these activities from the third group.

Age group from 45 to 54 took most intrest which is 53.3% which is slightly high then

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the chart’s subject and give an overview that women were more active in the middle age groups, which is relevant. However, the response reports only one specific figure, 53.3% for women aged 45–54, and stops before completing the comparison (“slightly high then…”). It also says men showed less interest “from the third group,” but does not explain the full pattern: male participation fell to 39.5% at ages 35–44, then rose, while women’s rate peaked at 53.3%. The task is addressed only partially, with key comparisons and supporting data missing. The response is also 82 words below the required minimum. To improve, complete the summary and select several accurate figures to show the main trends and contrasts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence introduces the chart, followed by an overview and then a specific detail. This gives the reader a starting point, and “Overall” signals a shift to the main feature. However, the response ends mid-comparison, so there is no developed progression through the age groups or a concluding summary of the data. The link between the overview and the single figure is also limited, and the unfinished phrase “slightly high then” leaves the comparison unclear. Use separate, complete paragraphs for the overview and key details, and connect comparisons explicitly—for example, contrast the male and female figures across age groups.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “proportion,” “age groups,” and “physical activities,” so the topic is generally clear. However, the range is limited, and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing chart data. “Get involved regularly in physical activities” is wordy, while “took most intrest” does not express the intended comparison naturally. Spelling errors such as “thier” and “intrest” are noticeable, and “mid of their age” is unclear. Aim for precise reporting language and accurate spelling. Useful alternatives include “participated in regular physical activity,” “recorded the highest proportion,” and “participation rate.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You produce a few complete sentence forms, including the opening description and an overview beginning with “Overall,” but the range is narrow and control is uneven. The final sentence is incomplete: “Age group from 45 to 54 took most intrest which is 53.3% which is slightly high then” has no finished comparison or complete ending. The phrase “females at the mid of thier age did regular activities” also has an unclear grammatical structure, and “in the year of 2010” is an awkward time construction. Practise writing complete sentences that compare two figures, using structures such as “At 45–54, the female rate was…, compared with… for men.” Check sentence boundaries and punctuation before finishing.

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