Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Overall the proportion of people who took part in the regular physical activity varied across the age groups.Women are more active in physical activity rather than men.However, there are different ages gap.

According to the figures men who are between 15 to 24 age were taking more part in this activity instead of women.But figures were go down of men between 25 to 65 or over 65 rather than women.

In this graph, women are main participants who took part with consistency.15 to 25 graph was decreased of women but later on this graph of females were increased after 35 to 65 and over.Additionally, In the 65 age or over this age the graph percentage of men and women were looking same approximately with the number of 47%.

However, the lowest females participants were observed in range of 25 to 44 ages that seemed to be 39.5% while the males percentage were 53.3 that were the highest ratio.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the broad comparison that women were more active overall and note that the sexes were at similar levels among people aged 65 and over. However, the account only partially reports the chart’s main features, and several statements misread the data. Men were highest at ages 15–24 (52.8%), then fell to a low of 39.5% at 35–44 before rising; women rose to a peak of 53.3% at 45–54. The claim that women’s lowest participation was 39.5% is incorrect: that figure belongs to men, while women’s lowest is 47.7%. The overview is also unclear, and the age ranges are sometimes inaccurate. Select the key highs, lows and contrasting trends, and check each figure against its series.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an overall shape, moving from an introduction and overview to details about men and women, and paragraph breaks help separate some points. However, progression is not consistently clear: the discussion shifts between trends and comparisons without a well-organised sequence, and the final paragraph repeats a comparison while confusing which sex has the highest and lowest values. Linking words such as “Overall,” “According to the figures,” and “Additionally” show an attempt to connect ideas, but some are used mechanically or do not clarify the relationship. For example, “However” introduces a point that does not clearly contrast with the preceding one. Organise the body by describing the male trend first and the female trend second, then use accurate comparisons to connect them.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “participants,” “consistency,” and “percentage,” so the reader can recognise the topic and intended comparisons. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning awkward or unclear. Phrases such as “different ages gap,” “taking more part,” and “main participants” are not natural ways to describe chart data. “The graph percentage” is also imprecise; refer instead to the participation rate or percentage. Repetition of “activity,” “graph,” and “percentage” further limits flexibility. Build a small set of accurate expressions for describing rates, peaks, lows and changes, and use them consistently rather than relying on general phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

There are attempts to form longer sentences and use subordinate clauses, but the range remains limited and complex constructions are often faulty. Errors in agreement and verb forms appear in phrases such as “figures were go down” and “the graph percentage … were increased.” Sentence boundaries and spacing are also inconsistent: “age groups.Women” and “men.However” need spaces, while several sentences would benefit from clearer punctuation. Other patterns, including “men who are between 15 to 24 age” and “the lowest females participants,” show problems with articles, number and sentence construction. These errors sometimes make the intended comparison difficult to follow. Practise accurate simple past descriptions and build longer sentences only when the clauses are grammatically controlled.

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