Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart compare the percentages of men and women of different age groups habits of doing routin psychical activites in 2010.

overall female dominate in all age group for doing regular exercise , while men between 15-24 age little surpass it.

women always prefers their fitness than men

The age group between 45-54 age 53.3% women and 43.1% are caring their fitness.However women and me who are on 55-64 age here also women 53% and men 45.1.Age between 14-24 men surpass it with 52.8 and women on 47.7.from 35-44 ladies were on 52.5 and men 39.5.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s subject and include several relevant figures, such as 52.8% for men aged 15–24 and 53.3% for women aged 45–54. However, the overview is inaccurate: women did not lead in every age group, since men had the higher rate among 15–24-year-olds. The response also omits the 25–34 group and gives only limited coverage of the overall pattern, including the rise and fall in women’s figures and the recovery in men’s rates after age 35–44. The claim that women “always prefers their fitness” is not supported by the data. The response is 97 words, below the required 150, so the task is only minimally covered. Include a precise overview and compare all age groups.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic sequence: it begins with a description of the chart, gives an overview, and then lists some age-group comparisons. This provides a starting structure, but the ideas are not arranged coherently enough to guide the reader through the data. The overview is followed by a broad, repeated claim about women’s fitness, and the comparisons then jump between age groups without a clear order. The sentence beginning “The age group between 45-54” is also joined directly to the next comparison, making the relationship between points unclear. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and details, and present the age groups in order, using clear links such as “By contrast” and “In the older groups.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “percentages,” “age group,” and “regular exercise,” and several figures are communicated clearly. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the description difficult to understand. “Routin psychical activites” appears to mean “regular physical activity,” while “caring their fitness” is not a natural way to describe participation. “Dominate” and “surpass” are also used imprecisely for comparing percentages. The phrase “women always prefers their fitness than men” is unclear and overgeneralises the chart. Aim for accurate, neutral reporting language such as “the proportion,” “recorded,” and “was higher than,” and check spelling and collocations before finishing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response communicates some comparisons through short clauses, but sentence structures are very limited and frequent grammatical errors sometimes obscure the intended meaning. For example, “The bar chart compare” has subject–verb disagreement, and “women always prefers” has the same problem. Articles and sentence boundaries are also unreliable, as in “The age group between 45-54 age 53.3% women and 43.1% are caring their fitness.” The final comparisons are often fragments or run together, with inconsistent punctuation and capitalisation. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, for example, “Among people aged 45–54, 53.3% of women and 43.1% of men exercised regularly.” Then check agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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