Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The given bar chart illustrates the australian men and women regular doing work percentage in the two thousand ten in different age group. The women physical working approximately in fifty age.

Firstly, Idescribe the different ages of men and women which perform physical activities regularly the young age male are perform more physical activities thatreach at 52.8 percent

while female percentage of physical work was near fifty that is 47.7 percent. Secondly, the men and women which was young adult the percentage of male is above forty and reach at 42.2 percent participate in physical activities the

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the chart’s subject and reports two accurate figures for the youngest group: men at 52.8% and women at 47.7%. However, it stops while beginning to describe the 25–34 group and does not cover the remaining age groups or provide a clear overview of the main trends, such as women’s higher activity rates in most groups and the male low point at ages 35–44. The statement that women’s activity is “approximately in fifty age” is unclear and does not summarise the chart accurately. The response is also 53 words below the required minimum, leaving the task substantially incomplete. To improve, write a concise overview and compare the key patterns across all age groups, using selected figures as support.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, with “Firstly” and “Secondly” signalling a sequence, and the opening introduces the chart topic. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the response ends mid-sentence after “participate in physical activities,” and the two points do not develop into a complete summary. The long, loosely connected sentences also make comparisons hard to track; for example, the description of the youngest group shifts from men to women without a clear sentence boundary. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and the main comparisons, and connect each age group clearly. Complete each sentence and avoid relying on sequencing words when the information itself is not fully organised.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “bar chart,” “percentage,” “age group,” and “physical activities,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “regular doing work percentage,” “physical working,” and “approximately in fifty age.” These choices make the intended meaning unclear and show limited control of collocation. “Young age” and “young adult” are also imprecise labels for the chart’s specific age bands. Aim for standard chart language such as “the proportion who exercised regularly,” “participation rate,” and “the 15–24 age group.” Check spelling and spacing as well, including “Australian” and “I describe.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to form longer sentences and make comparisons, but control of sentence structure is inconsistent. For example, “the young age male are perform” combines an incorrect subject–verb pattern with an unnecessary auxiliary, while “the percentage of male is above forty and reach at 42.2 percent” has problems with agreement and verb form. Articles and plural forms are also often missing or inaccurate, as in “different age group” and “the australian men and women.” The unfinished final clause further prevents the reader from seeing a complete grammatical structure. Practise accurate simple comparison sentences first, then add clauses with “while” or “whereas.” Proofread for subject–verb agreement, articles, plurals, and complete sentence endings.

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