Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates male and female in various age group of Australia doing daily basis exercise in the year 2010.

Overall, doing physical exercise female(45-54) was more dominant, and recorded the least (35-44). While men (15-24) remained most popular in this activity. It is also noticeable that regarding both elderly individuals who are 65 over did same level of exercise.

In terms of doing physical exercise, female 45 to 54 recorded the highest with 53.3%. Whereas the least ratio belonged to male 35 to 44 only 39.5% and followed by male 25 to 34 with 42.2%. Meanwhile, elderly peoples in both group 65 over showed similarity in joining exercise men 46.7% and female 47.1% respectively. Female 55 to 64 recorded the second highest in this activity with 53% and male in same age lagged behind to 45.1%.

Regarding daily exercise among men 15 to 24 age was the second highest proportion in this figure 52.8%, where 55 to 64 men ranked third with 45.1%. Notably, men 25 to 34 did 42.2% exercise, women however was much higher than in this age group 48.9%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify several important features accurately: women’s activity peaks at 53.3% among 45–54-year-olds, men’s lowest figure is 39.5% for ages 35–44, and the oldest groups have similar rates. You also report a number of figures correctly. However, the overview is not fully accurate: it says women recorded the least at ages 35–44, although their lowest rate is 47.7% among 15–24-year-olds. The claim that the oldest groups did the “same level” of exercise also overstates a small difference. Some comparisons are repeated, while the overall contrast—that women were more active than men in every age group except 15–24—is missing. A clearer, more complete overview and more selective comparisons would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and two detail paragraphs, and the information is generally grouped by gender and age. This gives the reader a basic route through the data. However, progression is weakened by repetition: the male figures for ages 25–34 and 55–64 appear more than once, and the final paragraph returns to comparisons already made. Some linking is awkward or unclear, particularly “Whereas the least ratio belonged to…” and “where 55 to 64 men ranked third.” Use transitions to show meaningful contrasts rather than simply adding another figure, and organise the details into a clearer comparison of the two genders across age groups.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “recorded the highest,” “proportion,” “lagged behind” and “similarity.” These choices help communicate comparisons, and the meaning is usually recoverable. However, several expressions are imprecise or unnatural for describing a chart: “more dominant,” “least ratio,” “remained most popular” and “joining exercise” do not fit the data particularly well. “Daily basis exercise” also suggests daily frequency, which the chart does not measure; it reports regular physical activity. Aim for precise, conventional terms such as “participation rate,” “highest percentage” and “were more active.” This would improve naturalness and accuracy without requiring more elaborate vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including contrast structures such as “Whereas…” and “women, however…,” and most of the data remains understandable. Some grammatical errors nevertheless recur. The opening phrase “male and female in various age group” lacks plural and article control, while “female 45 to 54 recorded” needs a clearer subject construction. In “elderly peoples in both group 65 over showed similarity,” number, article and preposition choices make the sentence difficult to follow. There are also sentence-boundary problems, as in “female 45 to 54 recorded the highest… Whereas the least ratio…”. Build complete sentences around each comparison and check agreement, plurals and articles; greater accuracy across these structures would make the response easier to read.

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