Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart provides infromation about the percentages of Australian men and women. Who regulary participate on phsycial activites, among six age group, in 2010.

Overall, the numbers of female enaged on physical activies on daily basis are higher compared with male. Adult female are highly prefered to do exercise compared with childrens and youngsters. People aged 65 and over have almost equal percenatge of engagement on physical activites.

In 2010, the numbers of female doing exercise everyday was higher compared with male. The numbers of female did physical activites on daily basis are almost fifty-percentage, at 48.9%, followed by male with 42.2%. However, boys aged between 15 to 24 had completely dominated girls by doing exercise everyday, at 52.8%, while girls are 47.4%.

In same peirod, male aged over 65 had slighly higher engagement on physical exercies than female, by 0.4%, that is 47.1%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response identifies the chart’s subject and makes a relevant attempt to compare men and women, including the male lead among 15–24-year-olds and the near-equal figures for those aged 65 and over. However, coverage is very limited: it omits the important pattern that women exceed men in every age group except the youngest, and it gives no account of the female peak around ages 45–64 or the male low at 35–44. Some details are inaccurate: the 15–24 female figure is 47.7%, not 47.4%, and the claim that women are higher overall is not supported by a stated overall comparison. The response is also five words below the required minimum. Report the main trends across all age groups and check figures against the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is a basic paragraph structure, with an introduction, an overview and two detail paragraphs, and the sequence is generally understandable. Linking words such as “Overall,” “However” and “In same period” help signal relationships. However, the progression is incomplete because the detail paragraphs cover only a few age groups and do not systematically compare the six categories. The repeated focus on daily exercise also makes the information feel less organised, while “In same period” does not clearly connect to the preceding point. Build the body paragraphs around a clear comparison—for example, the youngest group versus the remaining groups—and use accurate references so readers can follow which age group each figure describes.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentages,” “age group,” “engagement” and “compared with,” so the topic is usually recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “participate on physical activities,” “highly prefered to do exercise” and “completely dominated girls.” Repetition of “numbers” and “doing exercise” also limits precision. There are noticeable spelling errors, including “infromation,” “regulary,” “phsycial” and “percenatge,” which reduce the clarity and polish of the report. Use neutral, data-focused expressions such as “the proportion who exercised” and “was higher than,” and proofread spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts a few different sentence forms, including a contrast introduced by “However” and a relative clause in the opening. Nevertheless, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences awkward or unclear. For example, “The bar chart provides information … Who regularly participate” is incorrectly divided into a fragment, while “The numbers of female did physical activities” has faulty subject and verb construction. There are also problems with agreement and tense in “the numbers … was higher,” and the final sentence lacks a clear grammatical structure for expressing the difference. Practise complete sentences, accurate subject–verb agreement and consistent past-tense reporting; use simple, controlled comparisons before attempting longer structures.

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