Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

From the bar char we can see the comparison between Australian male and female's Physical excersise rate. At the early age 15 to 24 it shows that the men are leading the activity rate at 52.8% where the female are just behind them at 47.7%. But as they get older this trend shifts and men fall behind of female and it stays the same for most of the time. At the middle age 35 to 44 men fall behind by a big margin as they stand on just 39.5% their lowest where the women are at 52.5%. At the age of 45 to 54 women are still leading as they stand on 53.3% their highest. But while growing older men are getting involved more as teir percentange is growing on the other hand after reaching their peak the women seems a little disintersted as at 65+ they are almost getting equalled with men at 47.1% and 46.7% respectivlly.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important comparisons accurately: men lead in the youngest group, women lead across the middle age groups, and the figures are close among people aged 65 and over. The values you give for the 35–44 and 45–54 groups also match the chart. However, the response does not provide a clear, separate overview of the main pattern, and some key details are omitted, including the male recovery after ages 35–44 and the female peak at 53.3% followed by a slight decline. The claim that women become “disinterested” is speculative; describe only the change in the figures. A concise overview and more balanced coverage of the age groups would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response follows a broadly understandable order, moving from the youngest group through the middle ages to the oldest, and contrast words such as “But” and “while” help show changes between the sexes. However, the whole answer is presented as one paragraph, so the overview and supporting details are not clearly separated. Several transitions are repetitive, particularly the repeated use of “But,” and the long final sentence combines the male trend, female trend and oldest-group comparison, making the relationships harder to follow. Organise the response into an introduction, a brief overview, and one or two detail paragraphs. Use clearer links such as “By contrast” and “In the older groups” to guide the reader.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing data, including “leading,” “fall behind,” “lowest,” “highest” and “growing.” These choices help communicate the main comparisons. However, the range is limited and several expressions are informal, imprecise or incorrectly formed, such as “big margin,” “getting involved more” and “disintersted.” “Physical excersise rate” is also an awkward description of the chart’s measure, and spelling errors such as “char,” “teir” and “respectivlly” reduce accuracy. Aim for precise chart language, for example “participation rate,” “the gap widened,” and “the proportion increased.” Avoid attributing motives to the data, as in “women seems a little disintersted.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including clauses beginning with “as” and “while,” and the overall meaning is generally recoverable. However, errors occur in sentence structure, agreement, articles and punctuation. For example, “the female are” should be “women are,” while “women seems” needs the plural verb “seem.” The phrase “men fall behind of female” has an incorrect grammatical pattern, and “at 65+ they are almost getting equalled” is awkwardly constructed. Several sentences are joined with “But” and run on, especially the final sentence. Practise building shorter, controlled comparisons, then combine ideas using accurate subordinate clauses and punctuation.

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