Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

percentage of australian men and women daily life physical activity in 2010 and diffrent age group

2010 higher percentage of women and in chart only 15 to 24 age group of male higher othen then female but most of the chart show female regular physical activity is greater then male.

Among men in young age from 15 to 24 as we discuss before are higher except to female, after that 25 to 32 its growing down from 52.8 to 42.2 , from 35 to 44 it will decreased 42.2 to just 39.5 and at the end of chart male regular physical activity is only 46.7 .

In contrast womens age 15 to 24 are only 47.7, but that number are vary into higher high from 47.7 to 48.9 and move ahead from chart trend is up side from lower percentage and that change from 53.3 that are show a female daily regular activites are more other than males.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main comparison: women were more active in most age groups, while men led among 15–24-year-olds. You also report several relevant figures, including the male low of 39.5% at ages 35–44 and the female peak of 53.3% at 45–54. However, coverage is partial and some details are inaccurate or unclear: “25 to 32” should be 25–34, and the account does not clearly describe the female figures for the older groups or the male recovery after age 35–44. The overview is present but could state the contrasting overall trends more precisely. Select the key highs, lows and changes, and compare the sexes directly across the age groups.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic overall structure, moving from a general comparison to a paragraph about men and then one about women. Connectors such as “In contrast” and “after that” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow, and some references are unclear—for example, “that change from 53.3” does not clearly identify the age group or what is changing. The opening sentence is also not a clear overview, while repeated phrases such as “from the chart” add little. Organise the report into a concise overview followed by clearly ordered comparisons, and use linking expressions only where they clarify the relationship between figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age group,” “regular physical activity,” and “in contrast,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning awkward, such as “growing down,” “vary into higher high,” and “trend is up side.” Spelling and word-form errors, including “diffrent” and “activites,” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise chart language and avoid repeating general phrases. For example, describe figures as rising, falling, peaking, or remaining higher, and use “proportion” or “rate” where appropriate. More accurate vocabulary would make your comparisons easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to combine ideas in longer sentences, but the range of structures is limited and these attempts often contain errors that make relationships between figures difficult to follow. For example, “Among men in young age from 15 to 24 as we discuss before are higher” lacks a clear subject and verb structure, while “that number are vary” has problems with agreement and verb form. Articles and plurals are also inconsistent, as in “a female daily regular activites are more.” Most sentences need more reliable control of basic clauses before adding complexity. Practise writing short, complete comparisons with accurate subject–verb agreement and past-tense reporting, then combine them using simple subordinate clauses.

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