Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The column chart compares the number of Australian men and women doing their daily physical activities in 2010.

Overall, young males holds the large proportion, while females who are at their middle age are very active in physical activities. On the on hand, men and women both at their oldage remained stable while doing physical activities. Thoughout the chart it can be depict that women are more interested in physical activities to keep them healthy.

In one hand, males who are at their young age , specifically 15 to 24 years old are more encouraged to do workouts and it holds about 52.8%. In addition, at their last stage from 65 and over aged males peak at the second largest position. Subsequently, middle aged people who are 55 to 64, 45 to 54 and 25 to 34 accounted for 45.1%, 43.1% and 42.2%, respectively numbers are falling and people of these aged are less interested of doing physical activities.

On the other hand, females who are at their 45 to 54 age, they holds the biggest percentage than males which is about 53.3%.In. comparison, 55 to 64 and 35 to 44 ages of women have similar interest in this activity which marked 53% and 52.5%, respectively.

Rest of other ages women have moderate level of interest in doing such activites.In contrast, about

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the chart’s subject and include several accurate figures, such as 52.8% for men aged 15–24 and 53.3% for women aged 45–54. You also recognise that women lead in several middle-age groups. However, the overview is unclear and includes inaccurate claims: the older groups did not remain stable, and women were not more active in every age group. Men had the higher rate among 15–24-year-olds, while the female rate peaked at 45–54 and then declined. Some comparisons are also incomplete; for example, the female figures for the two youngest groups are not reported. Focus the overview on the contrasting male and female patterns, then select the key highs, lows and crossovers accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, an overview and separate paragraphs for men and women, so there is some organisation and the reader can identify the broad topic of each section. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow. The male paragraph moves from the youngest group to the oldest and then back to several younger groups without a clear organising principle. Linking phrases such as “In one hand,” “Subsequently” and “In contrast” are sometimes inaccurate or do not show the relationship between the figures. The final sentence, “In contrast, about,” is unfinished, which leaves the response without a complete ending. Group the data in a consistent order and use comparisons to connect related figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of vocabulary, including “percentage,” “accounted for,” “peak” and “moderate level,” and the chart’s general subject remains understandable. However, several choices are imprecise or unnatural for describing data. “The number” should refer to a count, whereas the chart gives percentages; “young males holds the large proportion” is unclear; and “more encouraged” does not accurately describe participation rates. There are also noticeable spelling and word-form problems, including “Thoughout,” “oldage” and “activites.” Repeated references to “interest” suggest motivation, which the chart does not measure. Prefer neutral reporting language such as “the proportion who exercised” and “the rate was higher,” and check spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “while” and “though,” but control is inconsistent. Subject–verb agreement errors occur in “young males holds” and “they holds,” while “men and women both at their oldage remained stable” has an unclear structure and tense relationship. Several sentences contain faulty or incomplete constructions, such as “In comparison, 55 to 64 and 35 to 44 ages of women have similar interest,” and the final “In contrast, about” is unfinished. Punctuation also disrupts readability, particularly in “53.3%.In. comparison.” Use complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, check agreement and articles, and punctuate sentence boundaries carefully.

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