Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given bar chart signifies the overall different age group of male and female in Australia who regulary do physical activity in 2010

Overall, The highest man age bracket who perform daily physical acticity is 15 to 24 and lowest man age bracket is 35 to 44 if we compare it to women the highest no of women who do physical activity is 45 to 54 and the lowest is 65 and over

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and attempt an overview by naming the highest and lowest age groups for each sex. However, the overview is partly inaccurate: men’s highest activity is indeed among 15–24-year-olds and their lowest among 35–44-year-olds, but women’s highest is 45–54, while their lowest is 15–24—not 65 and over. The response gives no figures or comparisons between men and women across the age groups, and the unfinished phrase “In Details” is not followed by any supporting information. As a result, the task is addressed only minimally. Develop the overview accurately, then report several key values and trends. The response also falls 74 words short of the required minimum, leaving too little detail to summarise the chart adequately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening identifies the chart, followed by an overview beginning with “Overall.” This gives the reader a simple starting structure. However, the ideas do not progress into a complete summary, and “In Details,” is left as an unfinished transition rather than introducing a paragraph of evidence. The overview sentence also combines several comparisons without clear separation, making the information harder to follow. Use distinct paragraphs for the overview and the main details, and connect comparisons in a logical order—for example, describe the male pattern first, then contrast it with the female pattern. Complete each paragraph with relevant information so the response forms a coherent whole.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses a small set of relevant terms, including “bar chart,” “age bracket,” “highest,” “lowest,” and “physical activity,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the vocabulary is limited and some choices are inaccurate or awkward, such as “overall different age group” and “highest no of women.” Spelling errors in “regulary” and “acticity” also reduce accuracy. The phrase “daily physical activity” is not a suitable description of the chart, which reports regular activity. Aim for precise chart language and accurate collocations, such as “the proportion of men” or “the percentage of women,” and use verbs such as “rose,” “fell,” and “peaked” to describe patterns.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a longer sentence with a comparison—“if we compare it to women”—and use basic present-tense forms to describe the chart. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors in sentence construction and punctuation are frequent enough to make parts difficult to read. For example, “The highest man age bracket who perform…” has an unclear noun phrase and incorrect agreement, while the long overview sentence joins several ideas without appropriate punctuation. Capitalisation is also inconsistent in “Overall, The…”. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, then combine ideas using accurate clauses. For example: “Men aged 15–24 had the highest rate, whereas the lowest rate was among men aged 35–44.”

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