Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar charts depicts information regarding the proportion of Australian men and women in different age groups and their regular physical activity data of 2010.

Overall, it is readily apparent that the percentage of female regular activity in different age group were increasing compared to the male. The highest number of physical activity did by 55 to 64 age group.

To begin with, the age group of 15 to 24, 52.8% of male and 47.7% of female were doing regular physical activity, the percentage of male had decreased between the age group 25 to 34, which noticed at 42.2% as compared to female 48.9%. the percentage of physical activity among male and female had increased gradually from 35 to 64 age group, the female percentage were 52.5%, 53.3% and 53% while, male percentage were 39.5%, 43% and 45.1%.

On the other hand, the percentage of male and female were approximately same, which were 46.7% of male and 47.1% of female in the age group of 65 and over.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You include figures for all six age groups and identify the close results among people aged 65 and over. However, the overview is not fully accurate: female participation did not simply increase compared with male participation, since the male rate was higher among 15–24-year-olds, and the highest female figure was at ages 45–54, not 55–64. The male rate also fell to its low at 35–44 before rising, while the female rate peaked and then declined. Some details are reported clearly, but the overview misses these key patterns, and the final comparison is not enough to compensate. To improve, summarise the contrasting trends and the highest and lowest points accurately before giving selected figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and two detail paragraphs, and the age-group comparisons generally follow the chart’s order. This gives the reader a coherent overall route through the information. However, progression is weakened by the broad overview and by the shift signalled by “On the other hand,” which does not clearly contrast with the preceding paragraph. The long sentence beginning “the percentage of physical activity among male and female…” also combines several figures in a way that is difficult to follow. Use clearer topic sentences and divide the data into meaningful comparisons—for example, the early age groups, the middle-age trends and the final group. More precise linking and referencing would make the organisation smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary such as “proportion,” “percentage,” “age group” and “decreased,” and the figures are usually expressed in terms appropriate to the task. However, some word choices and collocations are noticeably awkward, including “the highest number of physical activity did by” and “female regular activity.” Repetition of “percentage” and “physical activity” also limits the range. These choices do not prevent the reader from understanding the main subject, but they make parts of the report less natural and precise. Aim to use standard data-reporting phrases such as “participation rate,” “accounted for” and “reached a peak,” while ensuring that the chosen phrase accurately describes the figure or trend.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons with “as compared to” and a clause introduced by “which.” However, errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. For example, “The bar charts depicts” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “the percentage of female regular activity … were increasing” has problems with agreement and sentence construction. The sentence beginning “To begin with, the age group of 15 to 24…” is also incomplete in structure, and the lowercase “the” after a full stop shows inconsistent punctuation. Practise building accurate comparison sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement, sentence boundaries and capitalisation.

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