Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar graph demonstrates the proportions of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Overall, men belonging to teenage and early adulthood had the highest percentage.As people aged ,women had the highest percentage of people who exercised on regular basis.

From age group 15 to 24 ,52.8% of men exercised regularly while figure for women stood at 47.7%.In age group 25-34 ,women overtook men .Figures for women and men were 48.9% and 42.2% respectively. In age group 35 to 44 ,the gap widened further and women percentage rose to 52.5 % whereas men percentage dropped to 39.5%.

Age group 45 to 54 ,men 's percentage increased slightly and climbed to 43.1 percent while women 'proportion continued the upward streak and soared to 53.3 5.

In elderly individuals ,55 to 64 ,men's proportion who did regular physical activity reported an increase of 2 % and reached 45.1 % ,women's proportion declined a little and plummeted to 53%.People who were 65 and over in both genders were almost at equal level.Men had 46.7 % and women 47.1 % of individuals who were involved in physical activities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You select the main comparisons and report most figures accurately, including the male lead among 15–24-year-olds, the female lead from 25–34 onward, and the near-equal rates in the oldest group. The overview identifies the broad change in which gender has the higher rate, and the body gives useful age-by-age detail. However, the overview is imprecise: “men belonging to teenage and early adulthood had the highest percentage” could suggest a general peak across all groups, whereas the male rate is highest only in the youngest group. The claim that women’s rate rose as people aged also needs qualification, since it falls slightly after 45–54. The figure “53.3 5” is unclear, though the intended value appears to be 53.3%. A sharper overview of the overall patterns would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall shape: an introduction, an overview, and a chronological account of the age groups. This makes the comparisons easy to follow, and phrases such as “while” and “whereas” help contrast the two genders. The progression from the youngest to oldest group is logical. However, cohesion is not always smooth: the overview’s broad statement about women’s rates rising is not fully consistent with the later description of a decline, and the final paragraph shifts abruptly to “elderly individuals.” Some transitions are also mechanical, with repeated openings such as “In age group” and “Age group.” More deliberate grouping of the age bands—for example, the male decline and recovery alongside the female rise and slight fall—would create a more connected account.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use a suitable range of chart vocabulary, including “proportions,” “stood at,” “overtook,” “widened,” and “declined,” and the meaning is generally clear. There are also attempts at more varied trend language, such as “upward streak” and “soared.” However, some choices are inaccurate or unnatural for a neutral data report. “Plummeted” exaggerates the small fall from 53.3% to 53%, while “teenage and early adulthood” and “elderly individuals” are awkward descriptions of age groups. “Women percentage” and “men’s proportion who did regular physical activity” are also imprecise collocations. The unclear written figure “53.3 5” further reduces precision. Prefer conventional, exact reporting language and reserve strong verbs for substantial changes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use both simple and more complex sentence forms, including comparisons with “while” and “whereas,” and most sentences communicate the intended figures. This shows a useful grammatical range. Some errors remain in sentence boundaries, spacing, and possessive constructions: for example, “52.8%.As” needs a space after the full stop, and “women 'proportion” has incorrect punctuation around the possessive. The sentence “Age group 45 to 54, men’s percentage increased slightly” lacks a clear introductory preposition or subject framing, and “women’s proportion continued the upward streak” has an awkward grammatical construction. There are also inconsistent spaces before punctuation and percent signs. Proofread sentence openings and punctuation, and use complete, consistently formed clauses to improve accuracy.

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