Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian male and female in various age categories engaged in physical work in the year 2010.

As per the diagram, in the age category 15 to 24 more males were engaged in regular exercises compared to females. It was seen that more than half of total males who were under the age group 15 to 24 engaged in regular physical work. Whereas, the share of females were 47.7%.

On the other hand, the men and women included in rest of the age categories from 25 to 64 exhibited a revverse trend with more females keen on physical fitness. In particular, the percentage of women in the age categories 35 to 44 ,45 to 54 and 55 to 64 were sharply rose which was more than 50%. However, males under the age group 35 to 44 were the least section doing physical work.

Despite, approximately same proportion of Australian males and females who aged 65 and above actively participated in regular physical exercises which was just above 45%.

To sum up, compared to men more females aged from 25 to 64 were actively engaged in regular exercises. In spite of that men aged betweeen 15 to 24 were likely to do physical work.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main comparisons accurately: men lead in the youngest group, women have higher participation from 25 to 64, and the figures for those aged 65 and over are close. The overview in the final paragraph reinforces these broad patterns, and the reference to women exceeding 50% in three middle age groups is supported by the chart. However, some features are only partly developed. For example, saying the 35–44 male group was the “least section” does not give the useful comparison that male participation fell from 52.8% to its low of 39.5% before rising again. The claim that women’s rates “sharply rose” is also imprecise: they rise across the first four groups, then edge down. More precise figures and trend descriptions would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, comparisons between age groups, and a concluding summary. The main contrast between younger men and women aged 25–64 is easy to follow, and phrases such as “On the other hand” and “To sum up” signal the direction of the discussion. However, some linking is mechanical or awkward, particularly the repeated contrast markers “On the other hand,” “Despite,” and “In spite of that.” The paragraph beginning “Despite” is not grammatically completed as a contrast, which interrupts the flow. The middle-age comparisons would also be clearer if grouped systematically, rather than moving between broad ranges and individual groups. Use fewer, more precise transitions and organise the data in a consistent sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “age categories,” “share,” and “participated,” so the main information is generally understandable. There are also attempts at less common phrasing, such as “exhibited a reverse trend,” although the spelling error in “revverse” detracts from accuracy. Several choices are unnatural or imprecise for describing this chart: “physical work” suggests employment rather than exercise, and “keen on physical fitness” describes attitude rather than measured participation. “The least section” is also an unclear way to identify the lowest rate. Aim for consistent, accurate terms such as “regular physical activity” and “participation rate,” and avoid decorative wording when a direct chart description is clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons introduced by “Whereas” and “Despite.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but some errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, and punctuation limit control. For example, “the percentage … were sharply rose” combines an incorrect plural verb with an incorrect verb form; “the share of females were” has a subject–verb agreement error; and “Despite, approximately same proportion…” is an incomplete construction. There are also awkward patterns such as “males who were under the age group 15 to 24.” Check that each sentence has a complete main clause, match verbs to their subjects, and use “despite” with a noun phrase or “although” with a full clause. More accurate complex sentences would improve clarity.

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