Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar graph illustrates the proportions of Australian male and female who participated in regular exercise in 2010, differentiate in various age group. Unit measured in percentage.

Overall, it is readily apparent that among the all-age group’s women participation was higher than males, except young age group-15 to 24. Also, in all age groups women proportion was consistently rose. While, 65 and above age group, the percentage of males and females engaging in exercise equal.

To commence with, in the 15-24 age group, approximately more than one half of men participated in sports, while the proportion of women was at more than half. This trend reversed in 25 to 34 age group, where women 48.9% and male 42.2%. After this, in all age group women involvement in exercise rose steadily.

Moreover, age group 34-44, 45-54, and 55 to 64 women participation was at the highest, at around 53%, while male ratio was less than women at 39.5% to 45.1%, respectively. Most noticeable was 65 and over age group both male and female proportion were almost equal.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main pattern that women were more active in most age groups, and you note the male lead among 15–24-year-olds. The figures for 25–34 and the middle age groups are generally reported accurately, and the response includes an overview as well as supporting details. However, the overview contains two important inaccuracies: women’s participation did not rise consistently, since it peaked at 45–54 and then fell, and the rates for men and women aged 65 and over were close but not equal. The description of the youngest group is also unclear: men were at 52.8%, while women were at 47.7%, so neither was above half. More precise selection and explanation of these trends would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs of detail. Its progression from the youngest group to older groups is easy to follow, and linking phrases such as “After this” and “Moreover” help connect the comparisons. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent organisation and shows some stronger control through paragraphing and sequencing. However, cohesion is occasionally mechanical or unclear. “This trend reversed” does not specify the comparison being reversed, and “After this, in all age group” is an imprecise transition. The final paragraph also repeats the point that women’s rates were higher without clearly distinguishing the peak from the subsequent decline. Use more exact references and organise the figures around key trends.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportions,” “participated,” “involvement,” and “consistently,” and the meaning is generally understandable. There are also attempts to vary wording rather than repeat “percentage” throughout. Some choices, however, are inaccurate or unnatural for describing chart data: “differentiate in various age group,” “participated in sports,” and “male ratio” do not express the intended ideas precisely. “Women participation” is also an awkward collocation. These issues do not prevent the reader from understanding the main comparisons, but they limit precision and naturalness. Prefer standard chart language such as “participation rate,” “the proportion of women,” and “engaged in regular physical activity,” and check that each chosen term matches the data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex structures, including a contrast with “while” and a relative clause beginning “where.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “among the all-age group’s women participation was higher than males” has problems with articles, comparison structure, and agreement; “women proportion was consistently rose” combines incompatible verb forms; and “both male and female proportion were almost equal” has number-agreement errors. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also uneven, particularly in the final sentence. These are some errors rather than barriers to understanding, but they reduce accuracy. Practise forming comparisons with parallel noun phrases and checking subject–verb agreement and verb forms in each sentence.

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