Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrates data about a proportion of different age groups for both men and women who did regular physical activity in australia in 2010 .

Overall, the figure provides that femals from 25 old do more activities than men , whereras men under 24 years old are practice more activies in 2010 the got the highest number of practing activites .

its clear that after 25 years old weman are the highest nember of activies and they reach the peak at 52,3 from 44 to 55 however , men from 53 to 44 are the lawost number

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s subject and attempt an overview, noting that women are more active in most age groups while men lead among the youngest adults. However, the response only partially reports the data: it gives almost no accurate figures, and “52.3 from 44 to 55” misstates both the female peak (53.3% for ages 45–54) and the age range. The claim that men aged “53 to 44” have the lowest figure is unclear; the male low is 39.5% among 35–44-year-olds. The response also contains 99 words, below the required 150, so several key comparisons are missing. Add a clear overview and select accurate figures to support the main trends.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by an overview and a further comparison. The contrast between women’s higher activity in most groups and men’s lead among the youngest group gives the reader a central line of comparison. However, the ideas do not progress clearly, and the final sentence combines several points without explaining their relationship. Linking words such as “Overall,” “whereas” and “however” are attempted, but punctuation and placement make the connections difficult to follow. Use separate, clearly focused paragraphs for the introduction, overview and selected details, and connect each comparison explicitly to its age group.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “age groups,” “peak” and “highest,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand: “femals,” “weman,” “activies,” “lawost” and “practing activites.” Phrases such as “a proportion of different age groups” and “the highest number of activities” are also imprecise for reporting percentages. Aim for accurate, repeated-use terms such as “percentage,” “participation rate” and “physical activity,” and describe figures as higher or lower percentages rather than numbers of activities. Proofreading spelling would improve clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and a longer contrast, for example, “Overall, the figure provides that…” and the clause beginning “whereas.” However, the range is limited, and frequent errors in sentence construction and verb forms make the meaning difficult to follow. In “men under 24 years old are practice,” the verb pattern is incorrect; “men under 24 were more active” would be clearer. The phrase “they reach the peak at 52,3 from 44 to 55” lacks a clear grammatical relationship between the value and age group. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also unreliable, with spaces before commas and a run-on final sentence. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and build short, complete comparison sentences.

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