Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of physical activity of Australian male and female in several age groups in 2010.

Overall, women are seen to be more active in different age groups than men except for one. Men in the age group of 15 to 24 are the most active and women in the age bracket of 45 to 54 are the most active ones.

Men from 15 to 24 are the one who are most active in daily physical activity(52.8%) while 35 to 44 are the least active group of males(39.5%). Except from 15 to 24 age group, females are more active than men in every other age group. the second best active group of males are 65 and over where 46.7% are physically active.

Females belonging to the age group of 45 to 54 are the most active group of females which is 53.3% and 35 to 44 is the group of least active female group with 39.5%. In other age groups females are more active than males. The highest difference seen in the age group of 35 to 44 where male percentage is 39.5% and female percentage is 52.5%. The group with the least difference is the group of 65 and over where males constitute 46.% and females 47.1%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main pattern accurately: women recorded higher activity rates in every age group except 15–24, and you note the male peak and trough. The overview also correctly identifies women aged 45–54 as the most active female group. These relevant comparisons show a clear grasp of the chart. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: you describe women aged 35–44 as the least active female group but give the male figure, 39.5%, rather than the female figure of 52.5%. The final comparison also says males were at “46.%,” and the claim that 65 and over was the second-highest male group overlooks the 15–24 peak but is otherwise not clearly contextualised. More precise reporting of the female low and the overall trends would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and separate paragraphs for male and female figures. Comparisons such as “Except from 15 to 24 age group” help connect the data, and the reader can follow the broad message. However, progression is sometimes repetitive: the point that women exceed men outside the youngest group appears more than once, while the final paragraph shifts between female rankings and male–female differences. Some references are also unclear, particularly “the group with the least difference” followed by an incomplete male figure. Organise the body around the main comparisons—first the contrasting age trends, then the largest and smallest gender gaps—and use clearer references to each group.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of chart-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “age bracket,” “percentage,” and “difference,” and the meaning is generally understandable. There are also attempts to vary phrasing, such as “most active” and “physically active.” Some choices are unnatural or imprecise, however: “proportion of physical activity” does not clearly describe the share of people exercising, and “second best active group” is not idiomatic. “Daily physical activity” adds a frequency that the chart does not specify, while “constitute” is awkward for reporting a percentage. Aim for precise, conventional reporting language such as “the proportion who exercised regularly” and “the second-highest rate.” This would improve naturalness and accuracy without requiring more elaborate vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons introduced by “while” and “where,” and the main message is usually clear. Some grammatical errors remain across the response. For example, “Australian male and female” needs plural forms, and “Men from 15 to 24 are the one who are most active” has problems with agreement and sentence construction. The sentence beginning “Females belonging to the age group…” is also awkwardly formed, and the final sentence lacks a clear, complete figure for men. Capitalisation after a full stop is inconsistent (“the second best…”). Work on subject–verb agreement, plural nouns, and complete, well-punctuated comparison sentences; these corrections would make your varied structures more controlled.

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