Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian men and women in their different groups of ages who did regular physical activities in the year of 2010.

Overall,The daily work routine of Australian men and women are given in this bar chart.The percentage is approximately similar of men and women.Their are different groups of ages which can demonstrate their regular physical activities in the year of 2010.

First of all,The age groups of men and women from 15 to 24 and to 25 to 34 are similar.In these ages the percentage of their physical activities is similar.However,The group of ages from 35 to 44 and from 45 to 54 the quantity of women physical activities is slightly more than men.

Moreover,The groups of ages over 55 to 64 is also has similar rate of doing physical activities.If we talk about the group of ages over 65 the percentage of physical activities is declined as compared to other group of ages.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response identifies the chart’s subject and notes that women are more active than men in some middle age groups, but it does not accurately summarise the main patterns. The claim that the percentages are “approximately similar” overlooks the clear differences: men lead among 15–24-year-olds, while women lead in every other age group. The statement that the 15–24 and 25–34 groups are similar is also misleading, and the final age group is described as declining without specifying that this applies to women’s rate compared with the 55–64 group. The overview instead introduces “daily work routine,” which is not shown. Select the key gender comparisons and trends, and support them with accurate figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure, moving from an introduction and overview to details, and uses signposts such as “First of all,” “However,” and “Moreover.” This gives the reader some sense of sequence. However, the progression is weakened because the overview repeats general statements rather than summarising the chart’s main pattern, and the body groups age ranges without a clear, consistent comparison. Several transitions are mechanically attached to sentences, and references such as “the percentage” and “their” are unclear. Organise the body around the main contrast—men’s figures versus women’s—and use linking phrases to show how the pattern changes across age groups.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Vocabulary is sufficient to identify the topic and make basic comparisons, with phrases such as “percentage,” “age groups,” “slightly more,” and “as compared to.” However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, sometimes making the intended meaning difficult to follow. “Daily work routine” does not describe the chart, while “quantity of women physical activities” is not an appropriate way to report a percentage. Repetition of “group of ages” and “physical activities” also limits precision. Use standard chart language such as “proportion,” “participation rate,” “higher than,” and “rose” or “fell,” ensuring that each term accurately describes the data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer sentence forms, including “However, the group of ages from 35 to 44 and from 45 to 54…” and “If we talk about the group of ages over 65…,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in agreement and sentence construction occur in “The percentage is approximately similar” and “The groups of ages over 55 to 64 is also has similar rate.” Articles and plural forms are also unreliable, as in “a similar rate” and “other group of ages.” Punctuation is frequently incorrect, with spaces after commas omitted and capital letters used after commas. Build accuracy first with clear comparative sentences, then combine them using correctly formed clauses.

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