Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The graph illustrates the proportions of Australian males and females in six different age groups who regularly engaged in physical activity in 2010. It is clear that, as age increases ,the percentage of men who do physical activities decreased ,whereas the figure for women remains almost stable in the same time. Men in the 15-24 age group ,the highest percentage of males are engaged in physical activities among 6 age groups ,it was at 52.8%. The next group was 25 to 34 age , in this group men are lost their interest to do physical activities and it was 42.2%. Those aged 35 to 44 , the lowest number of proportion men are interest physical activities among 6 age type of age group ,it was at 39.5%.The percentage of men increased across the next three age groups compared the previous group , while the figure for men aged 65and over stood at 46.7%. On the other hand , females are more interest to engage physical activities with increasing age, females in the 15 to 24 , the percentage was at 47.7% and it was significantly increased at the age groups of 45 to 54 and it stood at 53.3%, this was the highest proportion among 6 age group. The last age group was at 65 and more where females are little less interest to do physical activities and it was at 47.1%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the chart’s subject and report several key figures accurately, including the male peak of 52.8% among 15–24-year-olds, the male low of 39.5% among 35–44-year-olds, and the female high of 53.3% among 45–54-year-olds. You also make the important comparison that women exceed men in most age groups, while men lead only in the youngest group. However, the overview says men’s activity decreases as age increases, which misses the recovery after age 35, and describes women’s figure as almost stable without noting its rise to a midlife peak and subsequent fall. The account also gives limited attention to the female figures for several age groups. A more precise overview of both overall patterns would make the main features clearer and more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph about men, and a paragraph about women. This gives the reader a broad route through the information, and phrases such as “On the other hand” signal a shift between the sexes. However, progression within the body paragraphs is sometimes awkward. For example, “Men in the 15-24 age group, the highest percentage…” is not a complete, clearly organised sentence, and the male paragraph moves through the figures with repetitive phrasing rather than grouping the trend efficiently. Some linking is also mechanical, with repeated “and it was” constructions. Use clearer topic sentences and connect comparisons directly—for example, contrast the male and female figures by age group—to make the organisation more fluent and the references easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportions,” “age groups,” “percentage,” and “stood at,” so the topic is generally clear. There is also some attempt to vary expression, such as “engaged in physical activity.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural: “men are lost their interest,” “females are more interest,” and “the lowest number of proportion men are interest” do not express the intended comparisons clearly. “Age type of age group” is repetitive, and “65 and more” is less suitable than the chart’s “65 and over.” Aim for precise, conventional reporting language such as “the proportion of men fell” and “women were more active.” This would improve accuracy and flexibility without requiring unnecessarily complex vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with clauses, as in “It is clear that…,” and the reader can usually understand the intended comparisons. However, some sentence structures are incomplete or incorrectly joined. “Men in the 15-24 age group, the highest percentage…” lacks a main verb, while “females in the 15 to 24, the percentage was at 47.7%” joins ideas without a clear grammatical relationship. There are also errors in verb forms and agreement, such as “the figure for women remains” when describing 2010 data and “men are lost their interest.” Punctuation and spacing around commas are inconsistent. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use consistent past-tense forms when reporting the chart.

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