Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrates the rate of Australian men and women in various age groups who doing regular physical activity in 2010.

Overall, the highest 15 to 24 age groups was extremely at peak point rather than all age groups, while the average male 35 to 44 age groups was a slightly decreased comapred with the all feamale age groups were doing physical activity in 2010.

Firstly, the rate of Australian male 15 to 24 age groups was at extremely higher did physical exercise in 2010 than all feamale groups. In additionb, the proportion of Australian female 15 to 24 age groups ws 47.7% doing activity in this year. The range of Australian males aged 25 to 34 level of groups was around 42.2%, while feamle 25 to 34 ages was done physical activity approximately 48.9% higher than male ages.

The percentage of Australian teenagers 35 to 44 age groups was average 39.5% focused on physical activity in this year lower than female, but the feamale same groups was 52.5% a little hihger than male. 25 to 54 and 55 to 65 both male and female age groups, were doing physical activity in 2010 like 43.1%, 53.3%, 45.1%, and 53%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s subject and include several relevant figures, such as 47.7% for women aged 15–24, 42.2% for men aged 25–34, and the figures for the 45–64 groups. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: the highest rate is not confined to the 15–24 group, since women aged 45–54 record the chart’s peak at 53.3%. The claim that the male 35–44 figure is “slightly decreased” does not clearly describe a comparison, and the final paragraph omits the 65-and-over figures. To strengthen the response, give a clear overview of the main pattern—men lead only in the youngest group, while women lead in the other groups—and report the key highs, lows, and changes accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs, and it generally moves through the age groups in order. This gives it some basic organisation. However, the progression is not consistently clear: the overview combines several comparisons in a confusing sentence, and the final paragraph lists figures without clearly matching each one to its age group. Connectors such as “Firstly” and “In addition” are used, but they do not always clarify how the information relates. Group the data into meaningful comparisons—for example, the youngest group separately, then the remaining groups—and use clear references such as “men aged 45–54” rather than “both male and female age groups.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “rate,” “proportion,” “percentage,” and “age groups,” so the topic is recognisable. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the comparisons difficult to understand. Examples include “at extremely peak point,” “the range of Australian males,” and “focused on physical activity”; these do not describe the chart data naturally. There are also noticeable spelling errors, such as “feamale,” “comapred,” and “hihger.” Aim for precise, conventional reporting language and check spelling. For instance, describe a figure as “the proportion of men who exercised regularly” and say that one rate “was higher than” another.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including comparisons with “while” and “than,” but control is inconsistent. Several sentences contain faulty verb forms or missing grammatical elements, as in “who doing regular physical activity” and “was at extremely higher did physical exercise.” Agreement and sentence construction also cause difficulty in “the highest 15 to 24 age groups was” and “both male and female age groups, were doing.” These errors can obscure the intended comparison. Practise building complete clauses with a clear subject and verb, such as “The percentage of men aged 15–24 was higher than the percentage of women.” Use consistent past-tense reporting and check articles, plurals, and punctuation when revising.

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