Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given bar graph illustrated the information about the percentage of Australian men and women in different age group who did regular physical activity in 2010. Age groups are divided into six categories.

Overall, womens were leading in every age groups among males only in 15 to 24 age group males were leading. Moreover, in 65 and over age group men and women were almost at same level. The major difference was assumed in 35 to 44 age group.

However, male was only leading in 15 to 24 age group in which male accounted for 52.8% while women 47.7%. In 35 to 44 age group, there was higher difference in male and female percentage of doing regular physcial activity among other age groups as male accounted for 39.5% and women 52.5%. Moreover, In 65 and over age group men and women were almost at same level which was approx 47%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the chart’s subject and give an overview, correctly noting that women were more active in all groups except ages 15–24, and that the figures for those aged 65 and over were close. The comparison between the 35–44 groups is also accurate, as are the figures you report for these groups and for ages 15–24. However, the report is only partial: it gives little account of the changes across the other age groups, including the rise in women’s rates to a peak at 45–54 and the recovery in men’s rates after 35–44. The response is 140 words, below the required 150. Add a concise comparison of the remaining age groups and develop the overview with the main trends.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and a paragraph with selected figures. This helps the reader follow the main comparisons. However, progression is limited because the final paragraph repeats points already made in the overview, particularly the male lead among 15–24-year-olds and the near-equal rates for the oldest group. The repeated use of “Moreover” and “However” does not always show a clear relationship between ideas, and the report omits several age groups rather than organising comparisons across the full chart. Grouping the figures into a clear sequence—for example, younger adults, middle-aged adults, and older adults—would create a more complete progression and reduce repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary such as “percentage,” “age group,” “accounted for,” and “difference,” so the topic is generally clear. However, the range is limited and some word choices or collocations sound unnatural, including “were leading,” “higher difference,” and “same level.” “Physcial” is also misspelled, and “womens” is not the correct written form. These errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the main comparisons, but they make the report less precise and polished. Use standard comparison language such as “had a higher proportion,” “the largest gap,” and “were at a similar level,” and check spelling and plural forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including the overview sentence beginning “Overall” and the comparison introduced by “while.” The main information remains understandable, but grammatical errors recur. For example, “different age group” needs a plural form, “womens were” has incorrect agreement and form, and “in every age groups” uses an incorrect plural pattern. The sentence “in which male accounted for 52.8%” also has an awkward grammatical construction, while inconsistent capitalisation after full stops affects accuracy. These issues fit a response with a limited range and frequent errors, although they do not consistently obscure meaning. Practise accurate plural and agreement patterns, and use shorter, controlled comparison sentences before adding more complex structures.

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