Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian men and women in various age category who did everydays physical activity in year 2010.

Overall, females tends to perform regular physical activity more than men does except in early ages where mens are more active than females.

In early stage of life, around 15 to 24 ages, males are more serious in regular activity than females as they are about 5% more punctual in everydays physical activity. However, in rest of the cases womens are more active than men by a significant margin. At the age of 35 to 44, mens and womens regular physical activity got its highest difference where womens were about 13.5% more active than opponent.

At the age of 45 to 54, womens were at the peak where 53.3% womens were doing exercise regularly whereas mens regular workout peaked at age 15 to 24, and second highest at the age of 65 and over. So, in general womens of Australia in 2010 used to be more regular in physical exercise than men.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the chart’s subject and give a relevant overview: women were generally more active, while men led in the youngest group. Several comparisons are accurate, including the roughly five-point male lead among 15–24-year-olds and the female peak of 53.3% at ages 45–54. However, some important details are incomplete or unclear. The largest gender gap is correctly located at 35–44, but the figures are not stated; the chart shows 52.5% for women and 39.5% for men, a 13-point difference. Also, saying women were more active “by a significant margin” across the remaining groups overstates the smaller gaps in some categories. Include a few more precise comparisons and describe the overall trends more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement, moving from an introduction and overview to age-specific comparisons, and paragraph breaks help distinguish these stages. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “However,” and “So” make the direction of the discussion easy to follow. Some connections are nevertheless mechanical or imprecise: “In rest of the cases” does not clearly identify the groups, and “At the age of 45 to 54” is followed by a comparison with the male peak at 15–24, which shifts focus abruptly. The final sentence repeats the overview rather than adding a concluding comparison. Grouping the age ranges by pattern—for example, the youngest group, the middle-age groups, and the oldest groups—would create smoother progression and clearer referencing.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing the chart, including “percentage,” “regular physical activity,” “peak,” and “more active,” so the main message is understandable. There is also some attempt to vary wording with “exercise regularly” and “regular workout.” However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for a data report: “more serious” and “more punctual” do not mean more physically active, while “opponent” is unsuitable for comparing men and women. “Everydays physical activity” and “in early ages” are also awkward forms. Prefer precise, neutral expressions such as “higher participation rate,” “the largest difference,” and “among the youngest age group.” More consistent use of chart-appropriate collocations would make the comparisons clearer and more formal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple statements and more complex structures, including the contrast in “females tends to perform … except in early ages” and the clause beginning “whereas.” The intended comparisons can generally be understood, but some grammatical errors recur. Subject–verb agreement is incorrect in “females tends” and “men does”; plural forms are also inconsistent in “mens and womens” and “53.3% womens.” The phrase “at the age of 35 to 44” does not fit a range of ages, and “where 53.3% womens were doing” has an awkward clause structure. Work on agreement, articles, and plural forms, and use a consistent past tense for the 2010 data. These corrections would improve accuracy while retaining your range of sentence forms.

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