Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

THIS CHART ILLUSTRAT THE AUSTRALIAN MEN AND WOMEN PERCENTAGE OF DAILY PHYSICAL ACTIVITY IN DIFFERENT AGE SECTION DURING 2010. MOST OF THE AGE SECTION WOMEN WERE THE HIGHEST DOING REGULAR PHYSICAL ACTIVITY BUT ONE AGE GROUP MEN WAS HIGHEST.

ON ONE HAND, YOUNG AGE GROUP MALE WERE HIGHT PHYSICAL ACTIVITY AT 52.8% AND FEMALE AT 47.7% WHILE, ADULT AGE 25 TO 34 MALE SLIGHTLY DECREASR AT 10% MEN AND WOMEN WERE AT 42.2 AND 48.9 RESPECTIVELY. 35 TO 44 AGE GROUP MALE SMALL DROP PERCENTAGE AT 3% MALE AT 39.5% AND FEMALE 52.5.

ON OTHER HAND, 45 TO 54 MALE SLIGHTLY INCREASE AND FEMALE WERE HIGHEST IN ALL AGE SECTION MALE AT 43.1 AND FEMALE 53.3% WHILE, THIS AGE SECTION 55 TO 64 ALSO MALE SMALL RISE 2% AND FEMAL SMALL FALL AT 0.3% MALE AND FEMALE WERE AT 45.1% AND 53% IN THAT ORDER. AGE 65 AND OVER FEMALE SLIGHTLY FALL AT 6% MALE AND FEMALE ALMOST SAME AT 46.7% AND 47.1 RESPECTIVELY.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s subject and report several relevant figures, including the male peak of 52.8% among 15–24-year-olds and the female peak of 53.3% among 45–54-year-olds. You also note the broad pattern that women recorded higher participation in most age groups. However, the overview is brief and the account of trends is not consistently accurate: for example, the male rate falls from 52.8% to 42.2%, a drop of 10.6 percentage points, not simply “at 10%,” and the female rate at 65 and over is 47.1%, not clearly a 6% fall from the previous group. Some comparisons are unclear or incomplete. A clearer overview and precise descriptions of the main changes would make the report more fully informative.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure: an opening statement followed by paragraphs covering younger and older age groups. This gives the reader some sense of how the information is grouped. However, progression within the paragraphs is difficult to follow because several comparisons are compressed into long, awkward sentences, and the repeated “while” clauses do not always show clearly which figures belong together. The signposts “ON ONE HAND” and “ON OTHER HAND” are also not a natural fit for comparing chart data, and the repeated use of “this age section” makes the links mechanical. Organise the figures in a consistent sequence, such as age group by age group, and use clear comparison phrases to connect each male and female figure.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age group,” “increase,” “fall,” and “respectively,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to interpret, such as “were hight physical activity,” “small drop percentage,” and “female were highest in all age section.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, including “illustrat,” “decreasr,” and “femal.” Use standard expressions such as “the proportion who exercised regularly,” “rose by,” and “was highest among.” More accurate, varied language for describing trends and comparisons would improve clarity and precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to combine information using clauses and linking words, but sentence structures are often faulty, and errors frequently make relationships between figures unclear. For example, “adult age 25 to 34 male slightly decreasr at 10% men and women were at 42.2 and 48.9 respectively” lacks a clear subject–verb structure and does not clearly identify the change being described. There are also problems with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, as in “female were highest in all age section.” Most sentences rely on similar, loosely connected patterns rather than controlled variation. Build shorter, complete sentences first, checking that each has a clear subject and verb; then add accurate comparative clauses, such as “The male figure fell, whereas the female figure rose.”

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