Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian males and fmales in various age catagrioes who did every day physical activity in 2010.

Overall, the percentage of females regular physical activity is higher than males in mostly group ages ,whereasBoth gender of 65 years above have less proportion of evry day activity .

boys of teen ages showed highest percentage of regular activity that accounted to 52.8% to compare with girls at 47.7% to oppose that groups of young age girls from 25 to 34 have 48.9% that was higher than boys at 42.2%. the percentage of women regular activity of 35 to 44 group ages also higher than men about 52.5% and 39.5% respectivily .

Catagories of 45 to 54 years the women have 53.3% to compare with men at 43.1% . the old group of women also have highes percentage in activity which was about 53% and men have 45.1% . 65year above men and women have almost same percent of activity whi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the chart’s main comparison: women recorded higher activity rates than men in most age groups, while men led among 15–24-year-olds. You also include several accurate figures, such as 52.8% for young men and 53.3% for women aged 45–54. This gives the response relevant coverage of the data. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: the 65-and-over group does not have the lowest rates for both sexes, since men aged 35–44 recorded the lowest male figure. The final comparison is cut off, and the description of the older groups confuses the 55–64 and 65-and-over figures. A clearer overview and more precise reporting of these key patterns would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, beginning with an introduction and overview before moving through age groups, and the comparisons are generally presented in a sensible order. Phrases such as “to compare with” show an attempt to connect the figures. However, progression is weakened by unclear or awkward links, including “whereasBoth gender” and “to oppose that,” and the final sentence stops before completing its point. The paragraphing also does not clearly separate the overview from the detailed comparisons. Use one focused overview paragraph, then group the remaining age bands logically, with accurate linking phrases such as “by contrast” and “similarly.” This would make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “percentage,” “age groups,” and “accounted to,” and the reader can usually identify the intended comparisons. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “did every day physical activity,” “boys of teen ages,” and “the old group,” where more precise, formal expressions are needed. Spelling errors such as “fmales,” “catagrioes,” and “respectivily” also reduce clarity. Build a reliable set of terms for describing participation and age bands, and check spelling and collocations before finishing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer comparative sentences, for example, “the percentage of women … also higher than men,” which shows an effort to describe relationships between figures. However, control of sentence structure is uneven, and errors in agreement, articles, and verb forms often make the comparisons hard to read. In “the percentage … is higher than males,” the comparison needs a parallel noun phrase, while “women have 53.3% to compare with men at 43.1%” is not formed naturally as a complete comparison. Punctuation and spacing are also inconsistent, and the final sentence is incomplete. Practise accurate comparative structures and check that every sentence has a clear subject and verb.

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