Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar char illustrates the percentage of Australian males and females in different age categories who was involved in regular physical activity in 2010. The figure represents in percentage.

Overall, women showed greater interest to stay active than men. Men aged 15 to 24 are more active than women in the same age group. Women age 25 to 64 brackets grew slightly, where as male from age 25 to 64 flactuated.

Men age group of 15 - 24 did a regular activity of 52.8% while, the patteren reversed and the figure consintatly fell at 42.2% for 25 to 34 age group. In contrast, the similar age category female widened slightly to 48.9%. Middle aged men age 35 to 44 was the least group invoved in daily physical activity of 39.5% but the same age category women showed more involvement and the trend incresed to 52.5%. Women continued to dominate and the figures rose to 53.3%, 53% in 45 to 54 and 55 to 64 age groups.

On the other hand men's interest marginally grew from 43.1% in age group 45 to 54 and to 45.1% in the 55 to 64 age men. This trend continued to increase to 46.7 % in men and 47.1% in women of aged 65 and over.

In summary, the young men of age 15 to 24 more invoved in physical activity than women. In contrast, females 25 and above showed more involvement to active than men.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main pattern accurately: men lead only in the youngest group, while women have higher participation in every group from 25 onwards. The overview also captures the rise in women’s figures through middle age and the men’s recovery after their low point. Most reported values match the chart, including the male low of 39.5% and female peak of 53.3%. This gives the response a clear, relevant account of the data. To make the summary more complete, clarify that women’s rate is broadly stable across ages 35–64 before falling among those 65 and over; the claim that it “grew slightly” across 25–64 oversimplifies this pattern. The final summary repeats the overview rather than adding a further comparison, so some features are developed more fully than others.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to age-specific comparisons, and the paragraphs generally group related information. Phrases such as “In contrast” and “On the other hand” help signal comparisons. However, progression is sometimes mechanical, and the final “In summary” repeats points already made rather than bringing the data together in a fresh way. Some links are also unclear: “Women age 25 to 64 brackets grew slightly” does not clearly explain what is growing, and “This trend continued to increase” could refer to either sex. Organise the body more deliberately—for example, compare both sexes within each age range—and use clear references to the figures or groups. This would make the overall arrangement easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age categories,” “fluctuated,” “dominate,” and “marginally grew.” These choices help describe comparisons and trends, and the intended meaning is usually understandable. However, several inaccurate or unnatural expressions limit precision, such as “greater interest to stay active,” “the figure represents in percentage,” and “the trend increased.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “patteren,” “consintatly,” “flactuated,” and “incresed.” In a chart report, accurate trend verbs and collocations are especially important. Prefer neutral descriptions such as “participation rate” and “was higher than,” and check spelling carefully. Avoid implying motivation or interest when the chart only reports activity levels.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including contrast clauses such as “while” and “but,” and most comparisons can be understood. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly with agreement, articles, and sentence construction. For example, “who was involved” should agree with the plural “males and females,” while “Middle aged men age 35 to 44 was” has a singular verb with a plural subject. The phrase “women of aged 65 and over” also uses an incorrect grammatical pattern. Punctuation around “while” is sometimes awkward, as in “52.8% while, the pattern reversed.” Aim to build accurate comparison sentences with consistent plural subjects and verbs, and proofread articles and clause boundaries. Greater control of these forms would make the range you attempt more effective.

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