Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian men and women in different age groups pursuing daily physical exercise in 2010. Overall, females participate more in physical exercise when compared to male. 45- 54 age group is the most active age group among women, wgereas the 15-24 age group is most active in men.

Delving into the figure, percentage of women participating in physical exercise increases with age. iI rises from 47.7 % for 15-24 age group to 53 % for 55-64 age group, representing the highest proportion. After 64 year, participation of women decrease and reaches to 47.1% for 65 and over. In addition participation of women is always greater than that of men expect for age group 15 to 24 years, when women's involvement is 47.7 % compared to 52.8% for men.

In contrast, number of men involved in physical activity fluctuates with age, it decreases from 52.8 % to the minimum value of 39.5 for 35 to 44 years of age, before rising to 46.7% for 65 and over.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You identify the main overall contrast: women were more active in most age groups, while men led among 15–24-year-olds. You also report the male low point at 35–44 and the female peak around middle age, so the response selects relevant features and supports them with figures. However, the overview says women’s highest activity is among 45–54-year-olds, whereas the detailed account gives the peak as 55–64; the chart’s actual female maximum is 45–54 at 53.3%. The claim that women’s participation “increases with age” also over-generalises, since it falls slightly after 45–54. Clarify the peak and describe the trend more precisely to make the overview fully consistent with the data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction and overview are followed by separate discussion of women and men. The progression from the broad comparison to age-specific figures is easy to follow, and transitions such as “In contrast” help signal the shift between groups. Some links between ideas are less controlled, however. The sentence beginning “In addition” repeats the comparison already made in the overview, and the long sentence starting “In contrast, number of men…” joins two independent clauses with only a comma. Paragraphing and linking are generally effective, but reducing repetition and using clearer sentence boundaries would make the progression smoother and cohesion more flexible.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use a suitable range of task vocabulary, including “proportion,” “participating,” “fluctuates,” and “minimum value,” and the meaning is generally clear. There is some variation in how you refer to activity, but several choices are imprecise or unnatural: “daily physical exercise” changes the chart’s meaning, which is regular rather than necessarily daily; “number of men” is unsuitable when reporting percentages; and “involvement” is less precise than participation. Spelling slips such as “wgereas” and “expect” also reduce accuracy. This range is adequate and includes some more ambitious wording, but more precise collocations and careful proofreading would show greater control and flexibility.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex structures, including “whereas” and “before rising,” and the main comparisons remain understandable. Some grammatical errors persist. For example, “females participate more … when compared to male” has an incomplete comparison, while “percentage of women … increases” needs an article or plural subject. In “In contrast, number of men … fluctuates with age, it decreases,” a comma incorrectly joins two independent clauses. There are also inconsistent spaces around punctuation and figures. These errors rarely prevent understanding, but they limit accuracy. Check articles and agreement, and divide comma-spliced sentences or connect them with an appropriate conjunction.

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