Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian males and females in six different age groups who engaged in regular physical exercise in the year 2010.

Overall, it is clear women were more active than men most of age categories, except for youngest group. While the percentage of physical activity men was highest among teenagers and young adults, for the women figure peaked the middle aged groups.

In the 15 to 24 age group, 52.8% of men did regular exercise, which was higher than the 47.7%of women. Howerever, the trend reversed in the next two groups. For example, aged 25 to 34, the active of proportion of men fell 42.25. The loest figure for the men compared 52.5 the women. The gape remained in the oldest group. In the 45 to 54age bracket,53.3%of women were physically activite, the highest percentagefor women, while the figure for men was 43.1%. In the 55 to 64 groups,53% of women and 45.1% of men did regular activity.Finally, the 65 and over group, the rate of equal 46.7 for men and 47.1% for women.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You provide a clear overview: women recorded higher activity in most age groups, while men led among 15–24-year-olds, and women’s figures peaked in the middle age groups. Several comparisons are supported with relevant data, including 52.8% versus 47.7% for the youngest group and the female peak of 53.3% at ages 45–54. This covers the main features well. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: the male figure for ages 25–34 is given as 42.25 rather than 42.2%, and the description of the next two groups does not clearly report the female values or explain that women exceed men in both. The final group is also described as equal, although the figures are close but not identical. More precise, complete comparisons would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to age-group comparisons, and phrases such as “Overall,” “However,” and “Finally” help signal progression. The main comparisons are generally grouped in a sensible order. However, cohesion is sometimes weakened by unclear links and abrupt transitions. “Howerever, the trend reversed in the next two groups” is followed by an incomplete and confusing comparison, while “The gape remained in the oldest group” does not clearly connect to the preceding information. The paragraphing is also disrupted by a large gap within the body. Organise the details into a clear sequence—perhaps younger groups first, then older groups—and use accurate references to show which age group each figure describes.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing the chart, including “proportion,” “engaged in regular physical exercise,” “peaked,” and “age bracket.” These choices show an attempt to vary wording rather than repeat the task statement. However, several inaccurate word choices, spelling errors, and awkward collocations make parts difficult to understand: “the active of proportion,” “The gape remained,” “physically activite,” and “the rate of equal” do not express the intended comparisons clearly. “Teenagers and young adults” is also less precise than the chart’s 15–24 age group. Aim for accurate, natural phrases such as “the proportion of men who exercised,” “the gap persisted,” and “the figures were almost equal.” Proofreading spelling and word forms would improve clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex structures, including a comparison clause (“which was higher than”) and a contrast introduced by “While.” Some sentences communicate the intended data clearly. However, grammatical control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make relationships between figures difficult to follow. For example, “women were more active than men most of age categories” is missing a necessary preposition, and “For example, aged 25 to 34, the active of proportion of men fell 42.25” has an incomplete opening phrase and an unclear verb pattern. There are also problems with articles, spacing, and sentence punctuation, as in “In the 55 to 64 groups,53%...” Practise complete comparison sentences and check articles, prepositions, and punctuation when editing.

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