Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar chart illustrates and compares the porportion of men and women of different age groups in Australia who participated in regular physical activities in 2010. Units are measured in Percentages.

Overall, we can see that the female did more physical activities than men in that year. Meanwhile, the only group that men surpassed the women was in the 15 to 24 age group.

Moreover, in the 25 to 34 age group , there was a rise from 42.2% for men to 48.9% for women . In the 35 to 44 age group figures also rose from 39.5% for males to 52.5% for females. Also , there was an increase from 43.1% for men to 53.3% for women in the 45 to 54 age group. In the 55 to 64 age group ,figures also rose from 45.1% for males to exactly 53% for females. Moreover, there was a difference of 0.4 % in the 65 and over age group between men and women.

In contrast, there was a drop from 52.8% for men to 47.7% for females in the 15 to 24 age group.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main pattern accurately: women recorded higher participation in every age group except 15–24, where men were ahead. The figures for the five groups from 25–34 onward are also reported correctly, and the overview gives the reader a clear central comparison. This meets the task well, though some important features are less fully developed. In particular, the overview could describe the overall trends: men’s rate fell to a low among 35–44-year-olds before rising, while women’s rate peaked around middle age and then declined. The final age-group comparison is described only as a 0.4-point difference; stating that women were at 47.1% and men at 46.7% would make the comparison clearer.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to age-group details, with the youngest group treated separately. This makes the information generally easy to follow. However, the body is organised mainly as a repeated list of comparisons, and connectors such as “Moreover,” “Also,” and “In contrast” sometimes feel mechanical rather than showing meaningful relationships between the data. The phrase “there was a rise from 42.2% for men to 48.9% for women” also makes a comparison between two groups sound like a change over time. Grouping the age ranges by trend—for example, the male decline and recovery, then the female rise and fall—would create clearer progression and more flexible cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “participated,” “surpassed,” “figures,” and “difference,” and the meaning is generally clear. There is some variation in how the two sexes are labelled, which helps avoid excessive repetition. However, several choices are imprecise or repetitive: “rise” and “increase” are used for comparisons between men and women rather than changes over time, and “did more physical activities” is less natural than describing participation rates. “Units are measured in Percentages” is also unnecessary and awkwardly phrased. Check spelling carefully, particularly “porportion,” and use precise terms such as “percentage” or “participation rate” consistently. More accurate collocations would make the report sound more controlled and analytical.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “while” and “in contrast,” and most comparisons remain understandable. Some grammatical and punctuation errors persist, however. The overview says “the female did more physical activities than men,” where the plural comparison needs more natural agreement and phrasing; “the only group that men surpassed the women was” also has an incomplete grammatical construction. Several sentences have inconsistent spacing around commas and full stops, and “Units are measured in Percentages” uses an unnecessary capital letter. The repeated “there was” structures also limit the range of sentence patterns. Practise accurate comparative clauses and vary structures—for example, “Women’s rate exceeded men’s in all age groups except…”—while proofreading punctuation and agreement.

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