Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

the bar chart illustrate the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Overall, women were more physciall active then men in five group age out of the six groups.In the youngest age from 15 to 24 the men are more physical activity than women. While the other age groups the women are more physical activity.

In the youngest age geoup from 15 to 24 the men took 52.8% regularly activity compared wih 47.7% of women. However the other age group grom 25 to 34 pattern changed the men activity fell down to 42.2% where as, the women percentage was increased at 48.9%. The different become more in 34 to 44 age group where only 39.5% of men activity regularly compared with 52.5 of women.

In contrast the age group from 45 to 54 the men excerise rose to 43.1% while the women reached at peak 53.3%. in the next age group from 55 to 64 , 45.1% of men excrised regularly compared with 53% of women. Finally, The percentage for both were from age 65 and over the men at 46.7% and compare with women 47.1% of the physical activity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the chart’s main comparisons and include figures for all six age groups. The overview correctly identifies that women recorded higher activity in five groups, while men led among 15–24-year-olds. Most reported values are accurate, and you describe the male rate falling to 39.5% before rising, alongside women’s peak of 53.3% at ages 45–54. However, some details are unclear or imprecise: “the percentage for both were from age 65 and over” does not clearly explain that the figures nearly converge, at 46.7% for men and 47.1% for women. A clearer overview of the contrasting trends and the near-equal oldest-group figures would make the key features more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction and overview are followed by details moving through the age groups in order. This makes the comparisons generally easy to follow, and transitions such as “However,” “In contrast,” and “Finally” help signal changes. Some linking is mechanical or awkward, though. For example, “While the other age groups the women are more physical activity” is not a complete, smoothly connected sentence, and “the other age group grom 25 to 34 pattern changed” makes the progression difficult to process. Paragraphing is appropriate, but clearer sentence boundaries and more precise references would improve cohesion. Try grouping the age groups by trend rather than repeating a similar transition for each one.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age group,” “compared with,” “fell,” and “rose,” so the main information is usually understandable. However, word choice and spelling errors are noticeable and sometimes make descriptions unnatural: “regularly activity,” “physical activity” used as an adjective, “excerise,” and “the different become more” do not express the intended meanings accurately. There is also repetition of “age group” and “men”/“women” without much variation. Build a reliable set of collocations for describing data, such as “the proportion who exercised regularly,” “the rate declined,” and “the gap widened.” Check spelling carefully, especially for key terms that recur in the report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including comparisons and clauses introduced by “while” and “whereas.” The meaning is generally recoverable, but some grammatical errors affect clarity. For example, “the bar chart illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, and “women were more … then men” uses an incorrect comparative construction. Several sentences also lack a complete grammatical structure, as in “While the other age groups the women are more physical activity,” while punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent after full stops. Aim for accurate comparison patterns such as “women were more active than men” and complete clauses with a clear subject and verb. More consistent control of these basic structures would make your varied attempts easier to read.

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