Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given illustration of bar chart depicts doing regular activity of austraian men and women in the year of 2010.

Overall, a glance at the graph reveals that women activity with age shows upward trend and goes down at the end. Whereas, with stark contrast, men have declined in performing regular activity with growing age, but at the end, start to have time for regular activity and shows rise

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and attempt an overview, noting that women’s activity rises before falling and that men’s figures decline and then recover. However, the response reports no figures or age-group comparisons, and the overview is only partly accurate: women’s rate rises to a peak around ages 45–54, then falls, while men’s rate falls to ages 35–44 before increasing. The task is addressed only minimally because the main data are not selected or supported with details. The response is also 81 words below the required minimum, leaving too little space to summarise the chart adequately. Include an overview plus several accurate comparisons, supported by key percentages.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is a basic structure: an opening sentence is followed by a separate overview, and “Overall” signals the shift to the main summary. The contrast between women and men is also relevant. However, the response ends after this brief overview, so there is no clear progression into specific comparisons or supporting details. The connector “Whereas” is used as a sentence opener without a complete contrasting clause, and the final sentence becomes difficult to follow. Develop a clear sequence: introduce the chart, summarise the main patterns, then compare the age groups with the most useful figures. Use linking words to show relationships between complete ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “bar chart,” “upward trend,” “declined,” and “stark contrast,” so the reader can identify the general topic and intended comparison. However, the range is limited, and several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “women activity,” “doing regular activity,” and “have time for regular activity.” “Austraian” is also misspelled, and “illustration of bar chart” is an awkward description. These choices make parts of the summary less clear and precise. Use standard chart language such as “the proportion who exercised regularly,” “participation rate,” and “rose” or “fell,” and check spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt more than one sentence pattern, including an introductory clause and a contrast introduced by “Whereas.” However, the range remains limited, and errors in sentence construction and agreement are frequent enough to make the final sentence hard to interpret. For example, “Whereas … men have declined” does not form a complete sentence, and “men … start to have time … and shows rise” has inconsistent verb forms and agreement. The opening also lacks an article in “of bar chart,” while “women activity … shows” has an unclear grammatical relationship between the subject and verb. Practise writing complete comparison sentences and check that each subject has a matching verb and consistent tense.

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