Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the bar paragraph illustrates about the percentage of male and female who do daily workout in 2010

in this paragraph i clearly see about the percentage of decreassing in workout by comparing the given data it can be observbed that the percentage of male do workout at the age of 15 to 24 is 52.8 and the female do workout 47.7 percentage male have a lot of enthusiasm and passion as well as energy as comparing to female. Female are less to do workout. Overall the percentage to do workout is gradually becomes less to less as shows in the chart after 24 male do less workout as comparing to female males workout is gradually decreasing but the females continues move downward to upward australian females participate in physicall activities actually tend to stay relatively steady or increase slightly rather than dropping off sharply at the age of 24 and than dramatically surging

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s subject and include two accurate figures for the youngest group (52.8% of men and 47.7% of women). You also notice that women’s participation is generally higher in several later age groups. However, the response only partially summarises the data: it does not give a clear, accurate overview of the main pattern across all six groups, and the claim that activity “gradually becomes less” is misleading. Men’s rate falls to 39.5% at ages 35–44, then rises, while women’s rate rises to a peak of 53.3% before falling. The explanation about men’s “enthusiasm and passion” is not supported by the chart. Focus on the trends and key comparisons rather than causes.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to move from an introduction to comparisons and an overall comment, and phrases such as “Overall” and “after 24” show an effort to connect ideas. However, the response is presented as one long, difficult-to-follow paragraph, with no clear progression through the age groups. Several ideas contradict or repeat one another: men are said to decrease, while women “continues move downward to upward,” and the final sentence is hard to connect to the preceding point. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and key details, and organise comparisons in a clear sequence. Shorter sentences and accurate linking expressions would make the relationships between the figures easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age,” “participate,” and “physical activities,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “daily workout” for regular physical activity and “a lot of enthusiasm and passion” to explain a pattern the chart does not establish. Repetition of “percentage,” “workout,” and “do workout” also limits precision. Spelling errors such as “decreassing,” “observbed,” and “physicall” are noticeable and can make the reader pause. Build a small set of accurate chart terms—such as “participation rate,” “declined,” “rose,” and “peaked”—and use them consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts longer sentences and comparisons, but complex structures are often faulty, which makes some relationships difficult to understand. For example, “the percentage to do workout is gradually becomes less to less” combines incompatible verb forms, while “the females continues move downward to upward” has errors in agreement and verb construction. The opening also lacks a clear grammatical structure, and sentence boundaries are unclear in the long final sequence. These problems occur often enough to affect readability, although the basic meaning and some figures remain understandable. Practise writing short, complete sentences first, then combine them using controlled clauses, for example: “The male rate fell to 39.5% before rising again.” Check subject–verb agreement and verb forms when editing.

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