Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart below compare the percentage of Australian men and woman in different age groups who did regular activity in 2010.

Overall, the bar chart compare the regular activity of Australian men and woman im the different group of ages, 15 to 24, 25 to 34, 35 to 44, 45 to 54, 55 to 64 and 65plus.

The percentage of Australian male and Female doing regular physical activity in 2010. The Male and Female who age are 15 to 24, they have doing regular physical activity 42.2 and female 48.9 percent. And the both groups ehose ages are 25 to 34, they have doing physical activity by male 39.5 and female 52.5. The both groups whose ages are 35 to 44 the male group 39.5 and female 52.5 percent doing physical activity. The male and female whose ages are 45 to 54 male doing physiacl activity 43.1 and female 53.3 percent.The both groups whose ages are 55 to 64 male doing 45.1percent and female 53% doing physical activity in 2010. The Male and female whose ages are 65 or plus 65 years old male 46.7% and female 47.1 percent.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and include several relevant comparisons, especially the female figures from ages 45–54 to 65 and the male figures for older groups. However, the report does not give a clear, accurate overview of the main pattern. Most importantly, the figures for the first three age groups are misreported: for example, men aged 15–24 were at 52.8%, not 42.2%, and women aged 35–44 were at 52.5%, not 52.5% paired with the stated male figure of 39.5% (the male figure belongs to ages 35–44). The repeated description of each age group also obscures the key feature that men were higher only among the youngest adults, while women were higher in all other groups. Select the main trends and check each figure against the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence: an opening, a general statement, and then figures arranged by age group. This gives the reader some sense of how the information is organised. However, the overview repeats the chart’s topic and lists all the age bands rather than summarising the main trends. The body then relies on the same pattern—“The both groups whose ages are…”—for nearly every comparison, so progression feels mechanical and the key contrasts are difficult to identify. Some sentences also run together, particularly around the 45–54 and 55–64 figures. Use a distinct overview followed by grouped comparisons, and connect related age groups with clear references such as “by contrast” or “in the remaining groups.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age groups,” and “regular physical activity,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repeated, especially “doing physical activity” and “the both groups.” Some word choices and forms are inaccurate or awkward, such as “woman” for the plural group and “65plus”; spelling errors such as “physiacl” and “ehose” also reduce clarity. Aim for concise chart language and vary the verbs used to report data, for example “accounted for,” “stood at,” or “was higher than.” More accurate use of basic vocabulary and fewer repeated phrases would make the comparisons easier to follow.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response mainly uses simple sentence patterns, with limited control of more varied structures. Errors occur frequently in verb forms and agreement: “The bar chart below compare” should be “compares,” and “they have doing” should be “they did” or “the figures were.” The repeated construction “The both groups … they have doing” is also grammatically faulty and makes several comparisons harder to process. There are problems with articles and sentence boundaries, including the long sequence of figures in the final paragraph, where full stops and clearer clause structure are needed. Practise accurate simple reporting sentences first, then combine comparisons using controlled clauses such as “While the male rate fell, the female rate rose.”

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