Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar graph shows the ratio of Australian men and women in different age group who did regular physical activity in 2010.

There are 6 different age group ranging from 15 to 24, 25 to 34, 35 to 44, 45 to 54, 55 to 64, and 65 and above. Overall, women from the 2nd to the 6th age group leads the chart, having the highgest percentage of 53.3% at ages 45 to 54. Whereas men were very active physically at the ages 15 to 24 with peak percentage at 52.8%.

Women tend to be active in the regular physical activity compared to men. As can be seen, the lowest percentage for women is the age of over 65 and above at 47.1%. On the other hand, men's lowest performance is at 39.5 % during the ages 35 to 44.

In conclusion, in the year 2010, Australian women are more active in regularly physical activity compared to the Australian men.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the chart’s subject and give a relevant overview: women recorded higher activity in most age groups, while men peaked among 15–24-year-olds. The reported extremes are accurate: women reached 53.3% at ages 45–54, and men fell to 39.5% at ages 35–44. This addresses the main task, but some features are less fully reported than others. The overview says women lead from the second to sixth groups, yet does not note that men were higher in the youngest group; nor does it describe the male rise after 35–44 or the female pattern across the middle ages. Include a few key comparisons, such as the 15–24 figures and the female peak, to make the summary more complete and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, supporting comparisons, and a concluding statement. The progression from the general pattern to the lowest figures is easy to follow, and linking phrases such as “Overall” and “On the other hand” help signal relationships. This meets the lower-band expectations securely and shows some effective organisation beyond a basic list. However, the conclusion repeats the overview rather than adding a useful final comparison, and “Whereas” begins a fragment after the overview sentence. The repeated focus on women being more active also makes the progression less efficient. Connect the contrast within a complete sentence and use the body paragraphs to compare age groups more systematically.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic vocabulary to communicate the chart’s main information, including “percentage,” “age group,” and “regular physical activity.” Some variation, such as “peak percentage” and “lowest performance,” also shows an attempt to avoid repeating the same wording. However, several choices are imprecise or unnatural for describing statistical data: “ratio” is not the right term for the percentages, and “very active physically” and “lowest performance” are awkward in this context. There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, including “highgest” and “age group” where the plural is needed. These do not prevent understanding, but more accurate collocations and careful proofreading would make the report clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mixture of simple sentences and some more developed structures, including “As can be seen” and the contrast introduced by “On the other hand.” Most of the intended meaning remains clear, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “different age group” and “There are 6 different age group” need plural agreement, while “women … leads” has a subject–verb agreement error. “Whereas men were very active…” is an incomplete sentence in this position, and “the age of over 65 and above” has an unclear grammatical construction. The final sentence also shifts to the present tense when describing data from 2010. Check agreement, sentence completeness, and consistent past-tense reporting while retaining a mix of sentence forms.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.