Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar graph shows a comparison of percentage of men and women of various age groups who are involved in regular physical activities in 2010 in a particular country.

Overall, women above the age of 25 mostly involved in regular physical activities . Whereas, mens below age of 24 till 15 are mostly involved in regular physical excercise. Women of age 45-54 have a highest percentage doing regular activities among all ages. Moreover, percentage is about the same for both genders above age of 65.

Women had a highest percentage of regular excercise in all age groups except one.The percentage of men is higher than women in age from 15 to 24 in which men constitutes 52.8% while women are just 47.7%. However, in age from 25-34 the percentage of women is 48.9% while men are around 42.2%, in age group of 34-44 women had a high percentage of doing physical excercise at 52.5% while mens percentage is composed of a lowest 39.5%. Women got a highest percentage of 53.3% in ages from 45 to 54 while men only constitute 43.1%. In ages of 55 to 64 women are also in majority in doing regular activities as the are at a seacond high of 53% while men are at 45.1%.

Lastly, percentage of women in age group of 65 and over is 47.1%, slightly higher than mens which constitute of 46.7%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main contrast accurately: men lead only in the 15–24 group, while women have higher activity rates in every older group. The overview also notes the female peak at 45–54 and the near-equal figures among people aged 65 and over, and the reported percentages are generally consistent with the chart. This gives the response a clear account of the key features. However, some statements are imprecise: “women above the age of 25” overlooks that women also lead at 25–34, and “women ... in all age groups except one” would be clearer if tied directly to the male lead among 15–24-year-olds. More concise grouping of the trends and a clearer comparison of the overall patterns would make the summary more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to comparisons across age groups. Linking words such as “Overall,” “However,” and “Moreover” help signal relationships, and the final sentence completes the comparison for the oldest group. Some progression is less smooth because the overview repeats points that are then restated in the detail paragraph, and the sequence of figures becomes a long list rather than being grouped into clear patterns. The opening overview also uses a sentence fragment beginning “Whereas,” which interrupts the flow. To strengthen organisation, keep the overview concise, then group the younger and older age bands in separate paragraphs and use comparisons to connect the figures rather than repeating them.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a relevant range of task vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age group,” “regular physical activities,” and “slightly higher,” so the chart is generally easy to understand. There are also attempts at more precise reporting, such as “constitutes” and “majority,” although these are not always natural in context. Repetition of “highest percentage” and “doing regular activities” limits flexibility, while spelling errors such as “excercise” and “seacond” reduce accuracy. Some collocations are awkward, for example “men are at 45.1%” and “women got a highest percentage.” Aim for standard chart-reporting phrases such as “stood at,” “recorded,” and “the highest rate,” and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons with “while” and “whereas,” and most of the data remains understandable. However, some errors recur in agreement, articles, and sentence construction. For example, “women ... mostly involved” needs a verb such as “were,” “mens ... are” has incorrect agreement and possessive form, and “a highest percentage” should use a different article structure. The sentence beginning “Whereas” is incomplete, and “in age from 25-34” shows an awkward grammatical pattern. These errors do not usually prevent the reader from following the comparisons, but they make the writing less controlled. Practise complete overview sentences and check subject–verb agreement, articles, and plural forms.

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