Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart represents the percentage of the austrailian citizens including men and women of different ages who did regular exercises in 2010.

Overall, the garph depicts that instead of a specific age group from 15 to 24 women lead the men in physical activties throught the year. while men shown up dominative only at the ages of 15 to 24 and approximately equally participated at the age of 65 and over.

The graph depicts that from the age 25 to 64 female show more energy and participation in thier daily physical activities rather than men. From age 24 to 34 there are 48.9% women, from 35 to 44 the percentage of female is 52.5%, and the leading age of women was between the age of 45 to 54 which shows the peak percentage of 53.3% of the females taking part in daily activites.

On the other hand, the men results show the peak time at the early ages between 15 to 24 when there are 47.7% male take thier part in physical exercises, this percentage shows a gradual downfall thorught the age 44 then afterwards it shows that from 45 to 65 and over the percentage goes up which means men usually do exrecises alot after the age of 44.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s subject and make a relevant overall comparison: women recorded higher activity in most age groups, while men led among 15–24-year-olds. You also select several useful female figures, including 48.9%, 52.5% and the peak of 53.3%. However, the overview is not fully accurate: men did not participate at approximately the same rate as women among those aged 65 and over (46.7% versus 47.1%). There is also a key data error in the male description: 47.7% belongs to women aged 15–24, while the male figure is 52.8%. The account is therefore only partly accurate, and some important comparisons—especially the male low point and the female trend after its peak—are not clearly reported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to separate discussion of women and men. Phrases such as “Overall” and “On the other hand” help signal the purpose of each section. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the overview’s claim about the 65-and-over group is difficult to reconcile with the later comparison, and the final sentence combines a decline, a rise and a broad conclusion without clearly separating these points. Some linking language is also awkward or repetitive, including repeated use of “the graph depicts.” Organise the details in a more consistent sequence, such as age group by age group or by gender, and use clear comparisons to connect the figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “peak,” “participation” and “gradual downfall,” and the reader can generally understand the topic. However, word choice and spelling are often inaccurate or unnatural, which limits precision. Examples include “dominative,” “show more energy,” “peak time,” and “taking part in daily activities”; these do not describe the chart’s measured rates as naturally as “higher participation” or “highest proportion.” There are also noticeable spelling errors such as “austrailian,” “garph,” “activties” and “throught.” Aim for accurate, neutral reporting language and check spelling carefully. Avoid implying that the chart measures daily exercise when it reports regular physical activity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of sentence forms, including a contrastive overview and longer sentences with clauses, so the response is not limited entirely to simple statements. However, control is uneven, and several sentences contain errors in agreement, verb forms or sentence boundaries. For example, “women lead the men” shifts tense, “female show” lacks agreement, and “there are 48.9% women” uses an unsuitable construction. The sentence beginning “while men shown up dominative” is also not a complete, well-formed clause. These problems sometimes make relationships between ideas harder to follow. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and constructions such as “the figure for women was…” and “men recorded…,” while breaking long sentences into clearer units.

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