Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart demonstrates percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activities.

Overall female are more active in every age group than men except 15 to 24 age group, while men have lower percentage in each other age group. Female are highest in 45 to 54 age group. In contrast men are the lowest in 35 to 44 age group.

On one hand, male in 15 to 24 age group are the highest is 52.8%. In contrast male lowest are in 35 to 44 age group at 39.5% which is the lowest in entire chart. Other than that male in age of 25 to 34 is 42.2%, while in age of 45 to 54 is 43.1%, also male in 55 to 64 age group is 45.1%. Lastly male in 65 and above age is 46.7%.

On the other hand, female in 15 to 24 age is 47.7% the only time lower than men. In contrast female are highest in 45 to 54 age group is 53.3% highest in entire chart. Also female in 25 to 34 age group is 48.9%, while female in 35 to 44 age group is 52.5%. However female in 55 to 64 age group is at 53%, lastly female in 65 and above age group is 47.1%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You report the chart’s figures accurately and cover both sexes across all six age groups. The overview identifies the main contrast: women exceed men in every group except ages 15–24, and it correctly notes the male low at 35–44 and female peak at 45–54. This gives the response a clear summary of the key features. To make the overview more complete, describe the broader patterns: men’s activity falls from the youngest group to 35–44 before rising, while women’s rate generally rises to middle age and then declines. Some comparisons are presented as separate figures rather than interpreted, so explaining the size or direction of the differences would strengthen the analysis further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for men and women. This makes the information easy to locate, and phrases such as “In contrast” help signal comparisons. However, the repeated “On one hand” and “On the other hand” structure, along with frequent “Also,” “Lastly,” and “In contrast,” makes the linking somewhat mechanical. The male and female paragraphs mostly list values rather than building a progression around trends or direct comparisons between the sexes. Grouping the figures by age pattern, and using clearer links such as “whereas” or “by comparison,” would create smoother progression and more integrated comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age group,” “highest,” and “lowest,” and the meaning is generally clear. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repeated, particularly “age group” and “in contrast.” Some word choices and collocations are awkward, such as “did regular physical activities” and “male in 15 to 24 age group are the highest.” More precise reporting language would make the description sound more natural and concise. For example, use “engaged in regular physical activity” and “the male figure peaked among 15–24-year-olds.” Varying terms such as “rate,” “proportion,” and “figure” would also help avoid repetition while maintaining accuracy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some complex sentences, including comparisons introduced by “while” and “although,” but most sentences follow a simple, repetitive pattern. There are recurring errors in articles, agreement, and sentence construction. For instance, “Overall female are more active” needs an article and a plural noun (“Overall, females…”), while “male in 15 to 24 age group are the highest is 52.8%” combines incompatible structures. “Female are highest” also has an agreement problem. These errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the figures, but they reduce accuracy and control. Practise complete comparative sentences, such as “The proportion of men was highest among 15–24-year-olds, at 52.8%,” and check articles and subject–verb agreement.

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