Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar graph illustrate the percentile of Australian men and women in different age groups who did daily physical activity in 2010.

Overall, it is crystal clear that the maximum figure recorded in women from 45 to 54 age doing regular exercise while the men from 35 to 44 age had accounted the lower percentage.

Firstly, in 2010, at the age of 15 to 24 year 52.8% boys and 47.7% girls did daily physical activities to being healthy in their whole life. After that the gents and ladies who had 25 to 34 years of age doing execise in the percentile of 42.2% and 48.9%. the 35 to 44 year old men had percentage of 39.5% which was lower than other age group who did regular workout while the same age of women had recorded 52.5% figure.

To compare with, middle age men from 45 to 54 years had percentege of 43.1% whereas the maximum of this age group women did exercise on daily basis that was 53.3%. On the other hand, 45.1% gents and 53% ladies were interested to do exercise. Lastly, the age group of both men and women above 65 had approx same figure 46.7% and 47.1%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You report the main pattern that women had higher participation in most age groups, and you identify the male low point among 35–44-year-olds. Several figures are accurate, including 39.5% for men aged 35–44 and 53.3% for women aged 45–54. However, the overview is not fully accurate: women’s highest figure is actually for ages 45–54, but the wording “maximum figure recorded in women from 45 to 54 age doing” is unclear. More importantly, the chart shows regular physical activity, not necessarily daily exercise, and the claim that participants exercised “to being healthy in their whole life” is unsupported. The final age-group comparison is useful, but the overall contrast between the sexes and the male recovery after age 35 could be stated more clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs reporting figures. The age groups are generally presented in chart order, which helps the reader follow the data. However, progression is sometimes weakened by mechanical or unclear linking, such as “Firstly,” “After that,” “To compare with,” and “On the other hand.” The last phrase does not clearly signal the relationship between the two figures, and “On the other hand” is followed by a comparison rather than a contrast. Some references are also vague, particularly “the maximum of this age group women.” Grouping the figures into a clear comparison of male and female trends, with more precise transitions, would make the organisation smoother and the relationships easier to understand.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary such as “percentage,” “age group,” “figure,” and “regular workout,” and you attempt alternatives such as “gents” and “ladies.” However, several choices are inaccurate, informal, or repetitive for an academic report. “Percentile” is not the right term for the chart’s percentages, while “boys,” “gents,” and “ladies” are less suitable than “men” and “women.” Phrases such as “did exercise on daily basis” and “were interested to do exercise” do not describe the data precisely, which records participation rather than interest or daily frequency. There are also spelling errors, including “execise” and “percentege.” More precise, neutral vocabulary would improve clarity and academic tone.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons with “whereas” and “which,” but grammatical control is inconsistent. The opening sentence has subject–verb disagreement: “The bar graph illustrate” should be “The bar graph illustrates.” Several clauses lack a finite verb or have faulty verb forms, as in “the gents and ladies who had 25 to 34 years of age doing execise” and “the maximum figure recorded in women.” Articles and prepositions are also often missing or misplaced, for example “at the age of 15 to 24 year” and “from 45 to 54 years.” These errors sometimes make relationships difficult to follow. Practise complete sentence patterns and check agreement, verb forms, and articles while retaining your attempts at comparison clauses.

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